自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, conciseness and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific supporting details linked with a connector. Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

範例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about five years old, and I learned to ride it in our garage with help from my father and sister. For example, my father held the seat while my sister ran alongside to steady me, and after a week I could ride without assistance.

建議: Make sentences grammatically correct and more natural, use linking words and give one specific example or consequence. Start with a clear opinion, then give two concise reasons, using plural/singular correctly and articles.

範例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in Thailand. Firstly, the hot and humid climate makes cycling uncomfortable for many people; for instance, commuters often prefer air-conditioned buses. Secondly, there are few safe bike lanes and heavy traffic, which discourages people from cycling for daily travel.

× I practice with it a lot with the help of my father and my sister.

✓ I practiced with it a lot with the help of my father and my sister.

The question refers to a past time (when you were a child), so the verb should be in past tense. 'Practice' is present tense; change to 'practiced' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when describing past events (e.g., 'I practiced a lot').

× At my home, in the garage, in my own garage.

✓ At my home, in my own garage.

This fragment is repetitive and lacks a finite verb. Combine and simplify to make a complete phrase. 'At my home, in my own garage' is concise and clear. If you want a full sentence, add a verb: 'I practiced in my own garage at home.' Suggestion: Avoid repeating the same information and include a verb to complete the sentence when needed.

× I don't think bicycle are popular in our country.

✓ I don't think bicycles are popular in our country.

The noun 'bicycle' is singular but the sentence refers to bicycles in general, so the plural 'bicycles' is required. Also the verb 'are' matches the plural subject. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when speaking generally about all items (e.g., 'bicycles are popular').

× Secondly, the lack of safe bike lane and heavy traffic.

✓ Secondly, there is a lack of safe bike lanes and heavy traffic.

This fragment lacks a main verb. Use 'there is/are' to introduce existence. Also 'lane' should be plural 'lanes' to refer generally; 'a lack of' followed by plural 'lanes' requires 'is' or rephrase to 'a lack of safe bike lanes and the presence of heavy traffic.' Suggestion: Use 'there is/are' for 'lack of' constructions and ensure correct pluralization (e.g., 'a lack of safe bike lanes').