自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: ปรับความชัดเจนของประโยคหลัก แก้ไวยากรณ์คำศัพท์ที่ใช้ผิด และลดความซ้ำซ้อน ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคตรงคำถามแล้วเสริมเหตุผลสั้นๆ โดยใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น because/so/instead ให้ถูกต้อง ตัวอย่างจุดที่ต้องแก้: ‘writing’ → ‘riding’, ‘start taking swimming corsets’ → ‘started taking swimming lessons’, ใช้ tense ให้สอดคล้อง (past simple) และหลีกเลี่ยงประโยคยาวเกินไป

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, my parents sold it after I lost interest because I stopped riding regularly and started taking swimming lessons instead. So the bike was no longer useful to me.

建議: ปรับความชัดเจนและความประสานของประโยค ใช้โครงสร้างเริ่มด้วยประโยคหลัก แล้วตามด้วยเหตุผลที่ชัดเจน ใช้ศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง (เช่น ‘sports’, ‘gyms’, ‘exercise’) และลดการซ้ำคำโดยใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น ‘however’, ‘because’, ‘among’. ให้ตัวอย่างหรือเหตุผลที่เฉพาะเจาะจงมากขึ้น เช่น ความสะดวกของการใช้รถยนต์หรือการมีฟิตเนส

範例: I don't think cycling is the most popular sport in my country. Although some people cycle, many prefer gyms and team sports because they are more convenient and offer social activities. Therefore, cycling is just one of several exercise options rather than the first choice.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child but my parents decided to sell it when I lost interest in cycling.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but my parents decided to sell it when I lost interest in cycling.

Comma needed before coordinating conjunction 'but' connecting two independent clauses. Use past tense consistently—sentence already uses past tense correctly. Suggestion: add a comma before 'but' to improve sentence punctuation and clarity.

× I stopped writing regularly and start taking swimming corsets instead, so bike was no longer useful to me so they just sort it out.

✓ I stopped riding regularly and started taking swimming courses instead, so the bike was no longer useful to me, so they just sold it.

Multiple errors: 'writing' should be 'riding' (wrong word choice—not in list but corrected to fit context), verb tense consistency: 'start' should be past 'started' (Past tense issue ID 5), 'swimming corsets' is incorrect — should be 'swimming courses' (word choice), missing article 'the' before 'bike' (article errors ID 22), 'sort it out' is incorrect in this context; use 'sold it' (verb meaning). Also add comma before coordinating conjunction and ensure past tense throughout. Suggestion: use consistent past tense verbs and correct vocabulary: 'stopped riding', 'started taking swimming courses', 'the bike was no longer useful', 'they sold it'.

× From my perspective, I don't think cycling is the most popular sport because we have a lot of sport and gyms for us to choose to work out.

✓ From my perspective, I don't think cycling is the most popular sport because we have a lot of sports and gyms to choose from for working out.

Errors: 'a lot of sport' should be plural 'a lot of sports' (Singular and plural issue ID 1), phrase 'for us to choose to work out' is awkward and ungrammatical—use 'to choose from for working out' to show correct preposition and gerund use (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11 and Verb + -ing form ID 8). Suggestion: use plural 'sports', use 'choose from', and 'for working out' or 'to work out' for natural phrasing.

× So I think biking is like one of the many choices that we can choose.

✓ So I think biking is one of many choices we can choose.

Redundant phrasing 'like one of the many choices that we can choose'—'like' and repeated 'choose' are unnecessary (Sentence structure errors ID 26). Simplify to 'is one of many choices we can choose' or better 'is one of many options.' Suggestion: remove 'like' and one 'choose' to avoid redundancy and improve clarity.

× So it is not our first choice to do.

✓ So it is not our first choice.

Unnecessary infinitive 'to do' and awkward structure (Sentence structure errors ID 26). The meaning is clear without 'to do.' Suggestion: omit 'to do' and say 'not our first choice' or 'not our first choice of activity'.