自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is natural, relevant and includes specific details (age, who bought it, where you rode it, practicing). To improve, remove filler words (e.g., “Uh”), correct tense consistency (“spend” → “spent”), and keep sentences concise (maximum 4–5 sentences). You can add a brief linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “so” or “therefore”) and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., “practiced” → “practised” or “kept practising”).

範例: Yes, I did. My mum bought me a pink bike when I was about six, just before I started primary school. I loved riding it around the park near my house, and I spent hours practising so I could ride without any help.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammar errors. To improve: start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (for example, “because” and “for example”), correct word choice (e.g., “acquired popularly” → “very popular” or “widely used”), fix grammar and sentence structure (e.g., subject-verb agreement), and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Aim for 2–4 well-formed sentences without filler words.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among primary and lower-secondary students. Many children cycle to school because it is convenient and inexpensive, and parents often feel it is a safe way for short journeys. For example, I often saw groups of children riding together on their way to class.

× I love riding it around the park near my house and spend hours practicing until I could ride without any help.

✓ I loved riding it around the park near my house and spent hours practicing until I could ride without any help.

The rest of the sentence describes past events (childhood), so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Love' and 'spend' are present tense; change to 'loved' and 'spent' to match past time frame and maintain tense consistency. Suggestion: keep all verbs that describe past situations in the past tense (e.g., 'I loved', 'I spent').

× Umm yes, but it's acquired popularly in my country, especially among primary and lower secondary school children.

✓ Umm yes, but bikes are very popular in my country, especially among primary and lower secondary school children.

The original uses 'it's acquired popularly', which is ungrammatical and unclear. The intended meaning is that bikes are popular; use a clear subject ('bikes') and a correct adjective phrase ('are very popular'). This fixes sentence structure and incorrect word choice. Suggestion: state the subject and verb directly (e.g., 'bikes are popular').

× Amen. Rise to school because it's convenient and inexpensive.

✓ Many children ride them to school because it's convenient and inexpensive.

The original contains 'Amen. Rise to school' which appears to be transcription errors. Correct subject ('Many children') and verb ('ride') and object ('them' referring to bikes) restore grammatical meaning. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and refer clearly to the noun (bikes).

× Umm and parents like infrastruct local journeys seen is safer and healthcare get more exercise.

✓ Also, parents like them because local journeys are seen as safer and children get more exercise.

The original is ungrammatical with mistaken words ('infrastruct', 'seen is', 'healthcare') and unclear structure. Replace with coherent adjectives and clauses: 'local journeys are seen as safer' and 'children get more exercise.' This corrects word choice and adjective/adverb usage and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases and passive construction 'are seen as' when expressing general opinions.