自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct and use correct tense, pronouns and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar: use past tense when talking about childhood, use articles (a/an/the), and avoid repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I avoided bikes because I thought they were unsafe for me, especially on busy roads. Instead, I preferred cars and learned to drive when I was older, so I felt more comfortable traveling by car.

建議: Answer directly and provide clear reasons using linking words. Use appropriate adjectives and correct sentence structure. For example, say whether bikes are popular, then explain why and include a specific example or contrast. Avoid filler words and vague phrases.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For instance, many students and commuters use bicycles to avoid traffic and save money. However, I personally prefer cars because I find them safer and more comfortable.

× I don't have bike because I don't want to drive because it's a not safe for me I think.

✓ I didn't have a bike because I didn't want to ride one when I was a child; I thought it wasn't safe for me.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child) so present tense 'don't have' and 'don't want' are incorrect. Use past tense verbs 'didn't have' and 'didn't want'. Also 'bike' requires an article 'a bike' and 'drive' is not the usual verb for riding a bicycle — use 'ride'. 'it's a not safe' is ungrammatical; use 'it wasn't safe' or 'it wasn't safe for me'. Combine ideas into a clearer past-tense sentence.

× So I want to drive a car and I can I can do that because I know how to drive car.

✓ So I wanted to drive a car, and I could do that because I knew how to drive a car.

Again the context is past, so 'want' and 'can' should be past 'wanted' and 'could'. Also repeat the article 'a' with 'car' ('drive a car'). The original also had a duplicated 'I can'. Change verbs to past to match the timeframe and remove duplication.

× Yes, this is so popular, but but I don't like bike is uh like not expensive thing, so that's why.

✓ Yes, they are very popular, but I don't like bicycles; they are, uh, inexpensive things, so that's why.

'This is so popular' mismatches plural subject; use 'they are' or 'bikes are'. 'I don't like bike' needs article and noun form: 'I don't like bicycles' or 'a bike'. The phrase 'not expensive thing' is awkward and likely the student meant 'inexpensive' but context suggests contrast — if they meant 'not expensive' that is 'they are not expensive'. Adjust subject-verb agreement and noun forms. Note: if the intended meaning was different (e.g., 'I don't like bikes because they are cheap'), clarify vocabulary; here corrected to 'inexpensive' and matched plurality.