自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct tense and remove redundancy (e.g. don’t say both “I have” and “I always use it”). Use linking words if you add more information.

範例: Yes, I did. I had a red bike when I was a child, and I rode it almost every day. I learned to cycle from my older sister, which made it more fun because she taught me tricks and encouraged me to practice.

建議: Answer directly and organize ideas with linking words (e.g. “Nowadays,” “however,” “because”). Use correct verb forms and clear vocabulary (commute, private cars). Provide one specific reason and one brief example or comparison to support your opinion. Avoid repetition and vague phrases.

範例: Nowadays bikes are less popular than they used to be. Many people now prefer private cars for commuting because they are faster and more comfortable. However, in some cities cycling is becoming more common again thanks to new bike lanes and public bike-sharing schemes.

× Absolutely yes. Since my childhood I have a red bike which I always use it and I learned cycling from my sister which was so appealing.

✓ Absolutely yes. Since my childhood I had a red bike that I always used, and I learned to cycle from my sister, which was very appealing.

Errors: incorrect tense for a past habit and mixed present perfect with past context (present tense should be past — use 'had' and 'used'); redundant object 'which I always use it' (remove 'it' and use 'that' or 'which' correctly); incorrect verb form 'learned cycling' should be 'learned to cycle' or 'learned cycling' with different structure; awkward modifier 'which was so appealing' unclear—use 'which was very appealing' or rephrase. Suggestion: keep past tense for childhood actions, avoid redundant pronouns after relative clauses, use correct verb patterns ('learned to' + base verb), and place relative clauses next to the noun they modify.

× Well, well, my perspective is that nowadays bikes are not common as in the past, because in the past many people use it to use just cycling when they commute committed to the course or works.

✓ Well, my perspective is that nowadays bikes are not as common as in the past, because in the past many people used them just for cycling when they commuted to school or work.

Errors: comparative structure incorrect ('not common as in the past' -> 'not as common as in the past'); tense inconsistency and wrong verb form ('many people use it' should be past 'used them'); pronoun number mismatch ('it' vs 'them' for bikes); infinitive/usage repetition 'to use just cycling' is incorrect—use 'used them just for cycling'; awkward phrase 'commute committed to the course or works' should be 'commuted to school or work'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense when contrasting past habits, use 'as ... as' for comparisons, match pronoun number to noun, and choose correct collocations ('commute to school/work').

× But nowadays a large number of people are using vehicles, namely private.

✓ But nowadays a large number of people are using private vehicles.

Errors: unnatural word order and punctuation ('using vehicles, namely private' should be 'using private vehicles'); 'nowadays' supports present continuous but sentence is fine with 'are using'—keep present continuous or simple present depending on emphasis. Suggestion: place adjective before noun ('private vehicles') and remove unnecessary 'namely'.