自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is generally natural and answers the question directly, but it is a little repetitive and sometimes disfluent (repeated words like “like”, filler sounds). To improve, make your response more concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words, and avoid repeating words. Also vary your vocabulary slightly (e.g., use “cycling” or “ride” instead of repeating “bicycle”).

範例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child and I loved riding it in the park. For example, I used to cycle around the park for about twenty minutes each day, and I also rode around my apartment complex to greet neighbours. Those rides were relaxing and helped me feel independent.

建議: Your answer addresses the question and gives a reason, but it contains hesitations and repetitive phrases (e.g., “like”, “umm”) and could be more organized. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then use linking words (for example, because, therefore) to present one or two specific reasons or examples. Replace fillers with precise vocabulary (e.g., “public transport” or “subway”).

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in South Korea, especially in large cities like Seoul. This is because the city is crowded and has an excellent public transport system, so most people prefer buses and subways for convenience and speed.

× It was like around like 20 minutes bicycle ride around the whole park.

✓ It was about a 20-minute bicycle ride around the whole park.

The sentence uses incorrect noun and modifier forms. '20 minutes bicycle ride' mixes plural minutes with a noun phrase; English uses a compound adjective with a hyphen and singular form: '20-minute'. Also 'like around like' is redundant; use 'about' or 'around' instead. Suggestion: use 'about a 20-minute bicycle ride'.

× I really, really liked pedaling when I was young.

✓ I really, really liked pedaling when I was young.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'liked pedaling' correctly uses the gerund after 'liked'. No change needed.

× Honestly I don't think bicycles are that popular in South Korea which is where I'm from because the whole city like I lived in Seoul and Seoul city is very crowded so most people take public transportation instead of bicycles such as umm buses, umm trains and cars.

✓ Honestly, I don't think bicycles are that popular in South Korea, which is where I'm from, because cities like Seoul are very crowded, so most people use public transportation instead of bicycles, such as buses, trains, and cars.

Multiple issues: tense and subject reference clarity. 'the whole city like I lived in Seoul and Seoul city is very crowded' is awkward and mixes singular/plural and tense. Use plural 'cities like Seoul are' to generalize, and 'use public transportation' is more natural than 'take' here. Remove filler words 'umm' and redundant 'Seoul city'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: restructure sentence into clearer clauses: 'because cities like Seoul are very crowded, so most people use public transportation.'

× And I would also go around my apartment meeting other people and saying hi.

✓ I would also walk around my apartment complex, meet other people, and say hi.

The phrase 'go around my apartment meeting other people and saying hi' has unclear verb forms and sequence. Use consistent verb forms in a list ('walk', 'meet', 'say') and a clearer noun 'apartment complex' rather than 'apartment' for the area. This improves clarity and parallelism.

× ...Seoul city is very crowded so most people take public transportation instead of bicycles such as umm buses, umm trains and cars.

✓ ...Seoul is very crowded, so most people take public transportation instead of bicycles, such as buses, trains, and cars.

'Seoul city is' is redundant; use 'Seoul is'. The main grammatical issue is punctuation and article use rather than third-person singular verb, but keeping 'is' is correct for third person. Also remove fillers 'umm' and add commas for listing. Suggestion: say 'Seoul is very crowded, so most people take public transportation such as buses, trains, and cars.'

× Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child and I loved going to the park with my bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child, and I loved going to the park on my bicycle.

The preposition 'with' is not wrong, but 'on my bicycle' is a more natural collocation in English for riding. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses. This aligns verb and prepositional usage.