自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the answer more concise, coherent and specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid uncertain language like “couldn’t remember” when you can state simple facts, and correct small grammar issues (e.g. “I can’t remember” or “I don’t remember”).

範例: Yes. I had a small bike when I was about six or seven. I rode it every afternoon around our neighborhood, often practicing with my friends until it got dark.

建議: Be more specific and use clearer linking words. Start with a direct opinion, then give one or two concrete reasons or examples. Avoid vague phrases like “bump in” and use correct collocations (e.g. “come across” or “see”). Also try to vary vocabulary (e.g. “commuting,” “recreation,” “mountain bikes”).

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular. For example, many people use bicycles for commuting in cities, and I often see both commuters and people riding mountain bikes for recreation on weekends.

× Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child and I couldn't remember what it looked like, but I know that I had it when I was like six to seven years old.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child and I couldn't remember what it looked like, but I know that I had it when I was about six or seven years old.

The main issue is inconsistent or informal expression of past time. 'couldn't remember' implies present inability; when recounting past memory, use 'couldn't remember' only if speaking at a past reference point, but here keep present reference: 'I can't remember' or reframe: 'I couldn't remember what it looked like' is acceptable if describing earlier state. The clearer fix is to correct the informal 'like six to seven' to 'about six or seven'. Use 'about' for approximation and 'or' for alternatives rather than 'to'. This improves clarity and conforms to standard English number range expression.

× It was a small bike that I used to ride every afternoon in our neighborhood.

✓ It was a small bike that I used to ride every afternoon in our neighborhood.

No grammatical error that matches the provided list. The sentence is correct: 'used to ride' correctly expresses a habitual past action. No change required.

× Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country because I often see people that are interested in riding bikes and I always get to bump in the people on the road using big bike or mountain bike.

✓ Yes, I think that bikes are popular in my country because I often see people who are interested in riding bikes, and I often encounter people on the road riding big bikes or mountain bikes.

Multiple issues: incorrect relative pronoun and preposition use and awkward phrasing. Replace 'people that' with 'people who' (incorrect use of pronouns - ID 12). 'I always get to bump in the people' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'I often encounter people' or 'I often bump into people' (preposition and verb choice). 'on the road using big bike or mountain bike' is ungrammatical: pluralize 'bike' and use 'riding' to show action; add 'or' between 'big bikes or mountain bikes' and remove 'using'. Also change 'always' to 'often' to match 'popular' observation and natural frequency. These edits correct present tense usage and structure and improve idiomatic expression.