自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity: use correct verb tenses and simpler sentence structures. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 concise supporting details using linking words (e.g., "At first", "After a few months"). Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences.

範例: Yes. I got my first bike when I was six years old. At first I had trouble riding because I couldn't balance, but after a few months of practice I became confident. Eventually I even raced my siblings on weekends.

建議: Make your response more natural and structured: start with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons or examples. Use appropriate vocabulary (popular, common, widespread) and correct verb forms. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences) and avoid filler words like "um" or unfinished fragments.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I often saw groups of children and adults cycling together in parks and on local roads, and in my family we regularly raced each other for fun.

× I actually had a bike when I was six years old.

✓ I had a bike when I was six years old.

The original sentence uses past simple correctly but includes the filler 'actually' which is unnecessary. Use past simple 'had' to state a past possession. Suggestion: remove 'actually' for clarity.

× At first I was having some problems when using my bike because I didn't know how to use rode it with my bike.

✓ At first I had some problems using my bike because I didn't know how to ride it.

Errors: incorrect progressive 'was having' for a past state (use simple past 'had'); awkward 'when using my bike' can be simplified to 'using my bike'; 'use rode it' mixes forms — correct verb is 'ride' in base form after 'to'. Suggestion: use simple past for past states and the base verb 'ride'.

× So after several months I get used to my bike and I became professional at using it and doing some races with my siblings.

✓ So after several months I got used to my bike and became good at using it and racing with my siblings.

Errors: 'get used to' is present; use past 'got used to' to match the past timeframe. 'I became professional' is acceptable but 'became good at' is more natural; 'doing some races' should be 'racing'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use gerund forms properly ('racing').

× I actually.

✓ I actually did.

Fragment: 'I actually.' is incomplete without a verb. Add an appropriate verb such as 'did' or restructure the sentence. Suggestion: complete the thought or remove the fragment.

× Yup, I actually think that it's very famous in my country because when I used to bike or use my bike in Jordan, I have seen many people playing against me and having fun.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because when I used to ride my bike in Jordan, I saw many people racing me and having fun.

Errors: 'it's very famous' is unnatural for 'bikes' — use 'bikes are popular'. 'Used to bike or use my bike' is redundant; 'ride my bike' is correct. 'I have seen' is present perfect but should be past simple 'I saw' to match 'used to' and finished past events. 'playing against me' better as 'racing me'. Suggestion: use consistent tense and natural collocations ('ride a bike', 'bikes are popular').

× And we were you doing races.

✓ And we used to race each other.

The original mixes words and word order is incorrect ('we were you doing races'). Use 'used to' for habitual past actions or 'we raced each other'. Suggestion: use correct pronouns and proper word order: 'we used to race each other.'

× Umm, even in my family it's known that we all love bike.

✓ Umm, even in my family it's known that we all love biking.

Count noun 'bike' needs to be noun 'biking' (activity) or 'bikes' (objects). 'Love bike' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'love biking' for the activity or 'love bikes' for the objects.