自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unfinished phrases. For example, say you had a bike, explain why you were afraid (e.g., poor balance, traffic), and finish with a short result or feeling.

範例: Yes, I did. However, I was afraid of riding because I couldn’t control my balance well and I worried about crashing into people. As a result, I preferred walking or being pushed by an adult until I became more confident.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting reasons and use linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct verb forms. Provide one or two concrete examples or consequences to make the answer more convincing.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. One reason is that we have major bicycle manufacturers, so bikes are affordable and widely available. Furthermore, the government has promoted cycling with dedicated lanes and public campaigns, so many people now prefer cycling to driving for short trips.

× I did, in fact, I was afraid of riding my bike because I couldn't really control it and I was really and crashing into other people was really frightening for me so.

✓ I did. In fact, I was afraid of riding my bike because I couldn't really control it, and crashing into other people was really frightening for me.

The original sentence has sentence structure errors and punctuation problems that interrupt tense flow. "I did, in fact, I was" should be separated into two sentences or joined properly. The fragment "and I was really and crashing" contains extra words and incorrect conjunction placement. Correct by separating clauses with a period or conjunction, removing extra words, and keeping past tense consistently (was, couldn't, was frightening). Suggestion: use clear sentence boundaries and remove duplicated or filler words. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Yes, I think we have the biggest manufacturer of bikes in the world.

✓ Yes, I think we have the biggest bicycle manufacturer in the world.

The phrase "manufacturer of bikes" is understandable but awkward; not a grammatical error in verb form. However, keep noun phrase concise: "bicycle manufacturer" is more natural. No change in verb tense or agreement is required, but clarity improves with the revised noun order. Grammar problem type ID:2

× That's why umm, the government try was trying to promote bike riding and it was very successful.

✓ That's why the government was trying to promote bike riding, and it was very successful.

The original mixes present tense "try" with past continuous "was trying," causing tense inconsistency. Keep past continuous to match narrative: "was trying." Remove filler "umm." Ensure subject-verb agreement: "the government was trying." Grammar problem type ID:5

× Everyone was riding you back to instead of taking uh, driving their own cars or motorcycles.

✓ Everyone rode bicycles instead of driving their own cars or motorcycles.

The original contains unclear and extraneous words "you back to" and mixed verbs "taking... driving." Use a clear structure: subject + past tense verb + object + instead of + gerund phrase. "Rode bicycles" or "was riding bikes" fits past narrative. Remove fillers like "uh." Grammar problem type ID:26