自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g., 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was scared of riding it'). Avoid hesitation fillers and unfinished sentences. Try to keep answers to no more than five sentences.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of falling. However, a few years later I decided to learn, so my cousin taught me in a park near our house. After practicing for several weeks I became more confident and started cycling regularly.

建議: Give a direct opinion then support it with clear, specific examples and linking words. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'popular, common, widely used') and correct phrasing ('when I go out of my house' not 'went out my home'). Avoid repetition and unfinished thoughts; finish your example with who you saw and what they were doing.

範例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in my neighborhood. For example, when I go outside I often see children riding bikes to school and adults cycling to the market, which shows that cycling is a common mode of transport here.

× I didn't have a bike when I when I was child because I scared.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was scared.

The sentence has multiple tense and wording problems. 'I when I was child' is missing 'was' and the article 'a' before 'child'; correct phrase is 'when I was a child'. 'I scared' is incorrect because 'scared' is an adjective that needs a linking verb; use 'I was scared'. Use past tense 'was' to match the time frame 'didn't have' and 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: include the article 'a' and the past form of the verb 'to be' before 'scared'.

× I was scared about it and, uh. And long time ago that I want to learn ride a bike, but I.

✓ I was scared of it. A long time ago I wanted to learn to ride a bike, but I didn't.

This sentence has fragmented structure and incorrect verb forms. 'Scared about it' is less natural than 'scared of it'. The phrase 'And long time ago that I want to learn ride a bike' mixes tenses and omits necessary words: use 'A long time ago I wanted to learn to ride a bike'. 'Want' should be past tense 'wanted' to match 'A long time ago'; 'learn ride' needs 'to' before 'ride'. The trailing 'but I.' is incomplete; complete it with 'but I didn't' to indicate the action was not completed. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense and complete clauses.

× I think bikes are popular in my country and especially in my neighborhood because when I, when I went to, when I went out my home and dragging around the street in my neighbor, I saw, uh, I saw children and.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country, especially in my neighborhood, because when I go out of my house and walk around the streets in my neighborhood I see children riding them.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses and contains incorrect prepositions and word forms. The main clause 'I think' is present, so subordinate clauses describing habitual actions should also be present: use 'when I go out' not 'when I went'. 'When I went out my home' needs preposition 'out of my house' or 'leave my house'. 'Dragging around the street' is incorrect for walking or moving; use 'walk around the streets' or 'ride around'. 'In my neighbor' should be 'in my neighborhood'. The phrase 'I saw, uh, I saw children and.' is incomplete; make it 'I see children riding them' for clarity and tense consistency. Suggestions: maintain present tense for general statements, use correct prepositions ('out of', 'in my neighborhood'), and complete the clause.