自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and off-topic. Start with a clear direct response (yes/no) and give relevant supporting details about the bike (who gave it, how you used it, memories). Keep it natural, avoid irrelevant nouns (e.g. “bag”/“set”) and limit your reply to up to 5 concise sentences. Use linking words (for example, “When I was small,” “because,” or “so”) to make your answer coherent.

範例: Yes, I did. When I was about seven my parents bought me a small red bicycle, and I rode it to the park every weekend. Because it had training wheels at first, I learned to balance gradually, and by the time I was nine I could ride without any help. I remember feeling very proud when I could cycle up the little hill near our house.

建議: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes, unclear words (“wine”), and some redundancy. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details (who rides, where, why) using linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “in addition.” Use accurate vocabulary (e.g. “young people,” “in the evenings”) and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many young people use bicycles to travel to school or meet friends in the evenings because they are cheap and convenient. In addition, there are more bike lanes in cities now, which makes cycling safer and encourages more people to ride.

× I have a bag where I have a set.

✓ I had a bike and a helmet.

The original sentence uses pronouns and nouns unclearly and the tense does not match the question about childhood. The examiner asked if the student had a bike when they were a child, so past tense is required (Grammar problem type 6: Present tense issue actually, but here the error is unclear pronoun/noun reference). Replace vague 'bag' and 'set' with clear nouns and use past tense 'had'. Use specific items relevant to the context (bike and helmet) to make the answer natural.

× Most of young people are, they love to ride a bike in the afternoon, wine or in their free time.

✓ Most young people love to ride bikes in the afternoon, on weekends, or in their free time.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement and redundancy issues. 'Most of young people are' is incorrect; 'most young people' is the correct noun phrase and should be followed by the verb 'love'. Also 'a bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match 'most young people' (plural). 'wine' is a likely typo for 'weekend' or 'weekday'; the corrected version uses 'on weekends' for a natural collocation. Remove the unnecessary pronoun 'they' after the clause to avoid redundancy. This fixes subject-verb agreement (Grammar problem type 27) and plural usage (Grammar problem type 1).

× So I think it's really important and it's really popular too.

✓ So I think cycling is really important and very popular too.

The original sentence is grammatical but slightly awkward and repetitive. Replacing 'it' with 'cycling' clarifies the subject and avoids vague pronoun reference (article/pronoun clarity). Using 'very' instead of repeating 'really' makes the sentence more concise and natural. This addresses article/pronoun clarity (related to Grammar problem type 22).