自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and directly answer first, then give one clear supporting detail. Avoid hesitation words (uh, um) and contradictory phrasing. Use a clear past-tense explanation and a linking word to connect ideas (for example, "because"). Also correct grammar ("my family couldn't afford it" rather than "my family will support that").

範例: No, I didn't. I grew up in a remote village and my family couldn't afford a bike, so we relied on walking and public transport instead.

建議: Start with a clear direct opinion, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "however" or "but"). Avoid repetition and filler words, and use accurate vocabulary ("shared bikes" or "bicycles" instead of "sharing shared bikes"; "motorbikes" or "motorcycles").

範例: Not really. Shared bicycles are becoming more common in cities; however, most people in my country still prefer motorcycles and electric scooters because they are faster and more affordable.

× My family will support that.

✓ My family supported that.

The context is about childhood, so past tense is required. Using 'will support' (future) is incorrect. Change to simple past 'supported' to match the time frame of the narrative. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently when describing past events (e.g., 'My family supported us').

× We couldn't, we didn't have the means to buy a bike.

✓ We couldn't; we didn't have the means to buy a bike.

The sentence refers to a past inability, so 'couldn't' and 'didn't have' are appropriate. The main issue is punctuation and clarity rather than verb form. Adding a semicolon or combining into one clause improves flow. Suggestion: Use proper punctuation or combine clauses (e.g., 'We couldn't afford one; we didn't have the means to buy a bike').

× No, not really. I know, uh, sharing shared bikes are increasingly popular, but our main screen is still those motorcycles.

✓ No, not really. I know shared bikes are becoming increasingly popular, but the main vehicles are still motorcycles.

Several issues: 'I know' is informal but acceptable; 'sharing shared bikes' is redundant — use 'shared bikes'. 'Are increasingly popular' is grammatical but 'are becoming increasingly popular' is more natural. 'Our main screen is still those motorcycles' is ungrammatical: 'screen' is incorrect word choice and 'those' with 'motorcycles' is acceptable but awkward. Replace with 'the main vehicles are still motorcycles.' Suggestion: Eliminate redundancy, choose correct nouns, and use 'become' for gradual change ('are becoming increasingly popular').

× Or, umm, or electric bikes. Oh.

✓ Or electric bikes.

This fragment is incomplete and contains duplicate conjunctions ('Or, umm, or') and a trailing interjection 'Oh' that doesn't add meaning. It should be a concise alternative: 'Or electric bikes.' Suggestion: Avoid filler words and ensure each utterance forms a complete idea.