自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more coherent, concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense and word choice) and avoid redundant phrases. Aim for natural phrasing: mention when you stopped using it, why, and one reason you still like cycling.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I don't have it anymore because it became too old and I stopped using it. However, I still enjoy cycling for exercise and often ride at weekends to stay fit.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence answering the question, then support it with clear, specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) to connect ideas, and fix grammar and word order. Avoid repeating words and clarify which areas you mean (rural, suburban, city).

範例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially in suburban and rural areas because public transport is limited there. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips to markets or schools, while in big cities cars and buses are more common.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child but now it's not available anymore due to age.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but it is no longer usable because of its age.

The original mixes past and present awkwardly and uses 'not available anymore' which is unnatural. Use past simple for childhood ownership and present state for condition: 'had' (past) and 'is no longer usable' (present). Replace 'due to age' with 'because of its age' for clarity.

× Due to many I'm busy with my activities and my work.

✓ Because of many commitments, I am busy with my activities and my work.

The phrase 'Due to many' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use a noun phrase such as 'many commitments' and use 'because of' or 'due to' before it. Also use full form 'I am' for clarity.

× But I do like bicycle cycling and it's recently being one of the major physical activities and one of the aerobics.

✓ But I do like cycling, and it has recently become one of the major physical activities and a popular form of aerobics.

'Bicycle cycling' is redundant; 'cycling' suffices. 'It's recently being' is incorrect: use present perfect 'has recently become'. 'One of the aerobics' is awkward; say 'a popular form of aerobics' or 'an aerobic exercise'.

× Well, it is popular to some extent popular in specific areas like in the peripheries and urban areas.

✓ Well, it is somewhat popular in specific areas, such as the peripheries and urban neighborhoods.

The sentence repeats 'popular' and uses awkward preposition 'in the peripheries'. Streamline to 'somewhat popular' and use 'such as' to introduce examples; 'neighborhoods' or 'areas' is clearer.

× But in because there is not much type of transportation.

✓ But this is because there are not many types of transportation.

The original mixes 'in' and 'because' incorrectly. Use 'this is because' to explain, and correct noun phrase 'not many types of transportation' (plural) rather than 'not much type'.

× So in urban areas or in the peripheral areas most of the people especially they use prefer to have a bike to move from one place to another.

✓ So in urban or peripheral areas, most people especially prefer to have a bike to move from one place to another.

Remove redundant pronoun 'they' after 'people'. Word order should be 'people prefer' not 'they use prefer'. Also 'most of the people' can be shortened to 'most people' for naturalness.