自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp thì quá khứ (sử dụng 'did' hoặc 'had'), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi cấu trúc (ví dụ: 'as a reward for my medals' thay vì 'rewards for my metals'). Hạn chế câu dài và giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

範例: Yes, I had a small red bike when I was a child. I got it as a reward for winning medals at school when I was in primary school. I rode it around my neighborhood every weekend and learned to balance on it quickly.

建議: Sắp xếp ý rõ ràng: nêu quan điểm trực tiếp, rồi đưa ví dụ và lý do cụ thể. Sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn cho sự thật, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'motorbikes and cars are more common' thay vì 'Most of communication...'). Dùng từ liên kết hợp lý và câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 4 câu).

範例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Most people prefer motorbikes or cars for daily transport because they are faster and more convenient. However, cycling is becoming more common among young people who care about health and the environment, especially in big cities.

× Yes I do have a small red one when I was a child when I was in the primary school as a rewards for my metals.

✓ Yes, I had a small red one when I was a child and in primary school, as a reward for my medals.

The sentence mixes present tense 'do have' with past time expressions ('when I was a child', 'when I was in primary school'), so the verb should be past tense 'had'. 'Primary school' does not need 'the' in general statements about schooling. 'Rewards' should be singular 'a reward' or simply 'as a reward' and 'metals' is a wrong word; the correct word is 'medals'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct noun choice: 'I had a small red one when I was a child and in primary school as a reward for my medals.'

× Most of communication in my countries are motorbike and cars.

✓ Most of the transportation in my country is motorbikes and cars.

The original has several problems: 'Most of communication' is incorrect collocation; use 'transportation' or 'transport' instead. 'My countries' should be singular 'my country' unless the speaker has multiple countries. With 'Most of the transportation' as a singular noun phrase, the verb should be 'is' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'motorbike and cars' mixes singular and plural; make both plural or use a collective: 'motorbikes and cars'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun ('transportation') and keep number agreement: 'Most of the transportation in my country is motorbikes and cars.'

× So I think that is not very popular for our citizen to own over their own a bike.

✓ So I think it is not very popular for our citizens to own a bike.

Problems: 'that is' is vague; use 'it is' as a dummy subject. 'Citizen' should be plural 'citizens'. 'to own over their own a bike' is ungrammatical — remove extra words 'over' and redundant 'own'. Use 'own a bike'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it is not very popular for our citizens to own a bike.'

× So but I think that there is a growing trend in the globalization and also sustainability.

✓ But I think there is a growing trend toward globalization and sustainability.

The original starts with 'So but' which is redundant; choose one conjunction, e.g., 'But'. 'Trend in the globalization' is awkward — use 'trend toward globalization'. 'Also sustainability' is better combined: 'globalization and sustainability'. Article 'the' before globalization is unnecessary. Suggestion: streamline the sentence to 'But I think there is a growing trend toward globalization and sustainability.'

× So they all have.

✓ So people are starting to have them.

The fragment 'So they all have.' is incomplete and unclear: missing object and context. Replace with a full clause that references bikes or technologies: 'So people are starting to have them.' This provides a clear subject ('people'), verb phrase ('are starting to have'), and object ('them') and fits the present progressive for a developing trend.