自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and a brief reason or feeling. Use correct pronouns and verb forms, and avoid repetition. For example, say you did not have a bike, explain why (e.g., family circumstances or lack of interest), and add a short consequence or feeling.

範例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn't afford one, so I learned to get around on foot or by bus. As a result, I never learned to ride, and I still feel a bit uneasy on bicycles now.

建議: Give a clear general statement about popularity, then support it with one or two specific, well-organized examples. Avoid filler words and hesitations, and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'mountain bike', 'road bike'). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'for instance' or 'also').

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities where traffic is heavy. For instance, many people use bicycles for short commutes, and my cousin owns three bikes: a mountain bike for trails and a road bike for commuting. This shows people choose different bikes depending on their needs.

× I'm not like the usual kids that has a dad who gets to teach him, teach them how to ride a bike.

✓ I'm not like the usual kids that have a dad who gets to teach them how to ride a bike.

Subject 'kids' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'have' not 'has'. Also pronoun reference should be consistent: use 'them' to match 'kids' (plural). Suggestion: match subject and verb number and keep pronouns consistent with their antecedent.

× My older cousin also has a bike, three of them and 1 is a mountain bike and 1 is like the mount umm the bike that you use on the road on the service Rd. so that.

✓ My older cousins also have bikes; there are three of them: one is a mountain bike and one is a road bike used on the service road.

Original mixes singular and plural incorrectly: 'My older cousin' (singular) conflicts with 'three of them'. Change to plural 'cousins' and 'have bikes'. Also replace numeric '1' with 'one' and clarify 'road bike'. Use 'there are' to state quantity. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches the described quantity and use clear nouns for types of bikes.