自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and clarity: use the correct past tense and a clear topic sentence, then optionally add one or two supporting details. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences). For example, start with “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.” Then add a brief detail like who gave it to you or how you used it, using a linking word if needed.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that my parents bought for me, and I used it to ride around the neighborhood every afternoon.

建議: Correct vocabulary, grammar and coherence: use the correct word “bikes,” avoid fragmented sentences, and organize your answer with a clear reason and a brief example. Use linking words (for example, “because,” “for instance,” or “especially”) to make the logic clear. Keep responses concise and specific.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes. For example, since the pandemic began, more commuters have chosen bicycles for travel to work and school due to convenience and safety.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. This is a tense inconsistency (present tense used for a past situation). Use past simple 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense for actions or states that occurred in the past, e.g., 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× I think Mike is popular in my country because it is widely used for transportation.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because they are widely used for transportation.

The student wrote 'Mike' (a proper name) instead of 'bikes' and used the neuter pronoun 'it'. This is a noun/pronoun mismatch and incorrect reference. Replace 'Mike' with the intended plural noun 'bikes' and use the correct plural pronoun 'they' to agree in number. Ensure pronouns clearly refer to the correct noun.

× Going to work and going to school especially boom when pandemic era began and.

✓ Going to work and going to school increased especially when the pandemic began.

The original fragment is ungrammatical: 'boom' is a noun used incorrectly, the clause lacks a clear verb structure, and there's an extra conjunction 'and' at the end. Recast the idea with a clear subject and verb: 'increased' conveys the rise in usage. Include the definite article 'the' before 'pandemic' and remove the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: form complete clauses with correct verbs and articles, e.g., '...increased especially when the pandemic began.'