自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Correct grammar and word choice, make the reply natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense correctly, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if you add extra information. For example, say who gave it, when, and how you used it. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

範例: Yes. My mother bought me a bicycle when I was seven, and I used it every day to ride to school. It was a small red bike with a basket, which made it easy to carry my books. Because the school was nearby, riding saved me time and was fun.

建議: Improve accuracy of vocabulary and sentence structure, and give a clear opinion with specific reasons. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one or two concrete details using linking words like 'because' or 'for example.' Avoid filler sounds and unclear words.

範例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many children and adults use them for short trips. For example, students often bike to school, and people ride around their neighborhoods for errands, which is cheap and convenient.

× When I was a child, I. Buy a Pike by my mother to went to my school.

✓ When I was a child, my mother bought a bike for me to go to my school.

Multiple sentence structure and tense issues: 'I. Buy' is fragmented and incorrect; past time 'When I was a child' requires past tense verbs. 'Buy' should be past 'bought'. 'Pike' is a misspelling of 'bike'. 'by my mother' is the wrong preposition and agent phrasing for a purchase; use 'my mother bought a bike for me' or 'my mother bought me a bike'. 'to went' mixes infinitive with past tense; use infinitive 'to go'. Suggestion: form a single coherent past-tense sentence: subject + past verb (bought) + object + purpose (to go).

× I think in my country pies are popular because uh children often use them to go to school and around their neighborhood.

✓ I think in my country bikes are popular because children often use them to go to school and around their neighborhoods.

The original uses 'pies' (incorrect word) likely confused with 'bikes'; correct word is 'bikes' (plural). 'Neighborhood' after 'their' should be plural 'neighborhoods' because 'their' refers to many children living in different areas. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Ensure noun number matches the implied plural subject.

× Umm in addition buys usually.

✓ In addition, people usually buy them.

The fragment 'Umm in addition buys usually.' is ungrammatical: 'buys' lacks a clear subject. Use a subject 'people' or 'parents' and correct word order 'usually buy' (adverb before main verb). Also clarify what 'them' refers to (bikes). Remove filler 'Umm'.