自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer directly and naturally. The student repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. To improve, give a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then add one or two brief supporting details (age, how you used it, or a short memory). Keep it concise (maximum 5 sentences) and use linking words if adding details.

範例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was seven and used to ride it every afternoon around our neighborhood. Because it was small and lightweight, I learned to ride quickly and often raced my friends.

建議: Be more natural, organized and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no or a short opinion), then support it with specific evidence (who rides, where, and why). Use correct grammar and linking words (for example, 'because', 'for example', 'also'). Avoid vague phrases like 'based on the trend of the Today' and filler words such as 'you know'. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

範例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines, especially among teenagers. For example, many young people use mountain bikes or road bikes to commute to school or exercise, and bicycle clubs have become more common in cities. I think their popularity has grown because cycling is affordable and helps avoid traffic.

× Well, I live in the Philippines and I think based on the trend of the Today is that some of them are eager to learn how to use a bike.

✓ Well, I live in the Philippines, and I think that based on the current trend, some people are eager to learn how to ride a bike.

The original sentence has awkward word order and unnecessary or incorrect words ('the Today is') causing a sentence structure error. 'Some of them' is unclear; use 'some people'. Use 'ride a bike' (common collocation) instead of 'use a bike'. Insert commas for clarity and include 'that' after 'think' to introduce the clause. Suggestion: simplify the clause, remove extraneous words, and use standard collocations.

× And also I can see most of the teenagers here riding, you know, bikes which are meant for faster way.

✓ Also, I can see most teenagers here riding bikes that are meant for speed.

The phrase 'meant for faster way' is ungrammatical and awkward; it uses incorrect adjective/adverb choice and word order. 'Riding, you know, bikes' contains a filler 'you know' that disrupts flow. Use 'meant for speed' or 'designed for faster riding' to convey the idea. Remove unnecessary commas and filler words. Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns ('speed') or adjective+noun phrases ('faster riding') and keep word order clear.