自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (avoid redundant phrases like “I believe that” and double objects), and give a realistic, specific detail. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words if adding details.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My first bike was given to me by my father when I was about five, and it had training wheels. I remember learning to ride in the park near our house, and my father stayed close by until I felt confident.

建議: Clarify and correct errors, use linking words, and give a specific reason or example. Avoid incorrect verbs (“teach the child how to write” is irrelevant) and be careful with article use and pluralisation. Provide one or two concise supporting details to explain why bikes are popular.

範例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Generally, children start learning to ride around five or six years old, and parents—often fathers—teach them. In many cities people also use bicycles for short trips because they are cheap and convenient.

× I believe that my first bike I got it when I was one year old and was given by my father.

✓ I believe that I got my first bike when I was one year old and it was given to me by my father.

This sentence has problems with word order and missing past participle usage in the passive clause. The phrase 'my first bike I got it' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'I got my first bike' for correct subject-object order. The passive clause 'was given by my father' needs an object: 'it was given to me by my father' uses the past participle 'given' correctly with the preposition 'to' to indicate the recipient. Suggestion: reorder to 'I got my first bike when I was one year old and it was given to me by my father.'

× Bikes are really popular in my country.

✓ Bicycles are really popular in my country.

The original sentence is not strictly ungrammatical, but 'bikes' is informal; for a slightly more formal or neutral register, use 'bicycles.' This is a style suggestion rather than a strict grammar correction. If focusing only on grammar list items, no change is required because plural form 'Bikes are' is correct. Suggestion: use 'bicycles' in formal contexts.

× Normally people start riding bicycle when they are young, around 5-6 years old, and fathers are then normally ones that teach the child how to write.

✓ Normally people start riding bicycles when they are young, around five or six years old, and fathers are normally the ones who teach the child how to ride.

Several issues: 'riding bicycle' requires the plural or a determiner: 'riding bicycles' or 'riding a bicycle.' Use words for numbers in text form or write 'five or six' for clarity. The phrase 'ones that teach' is better as 'the ones who teach' because 'who' refers to people. The final word 'write' is incorrect contextually; the intended verb is 'ride.' Also 'fathers are then normally ones' is awkward—use 'fathers are normally the ones.' Suggestions: 'start riding bicycles when they are young, around five or six years old, and fathers are normally the ones who teach the child how to ride.'