自行车— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct vocabulary (bike, not back), and use linking words to add one or two specific details. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition. For example, say when you had it, whose it was, its appearance, and how long you used it.

範例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It belonged to my grandmother and was purple. I used it for about three years to ride around the neighborhood and visit friends.

建議: Make the answer more natural and specific. Start with a direct statement, then give two clear reasons using linking words (for example, because, and). Avoid hesitations and incorrect words (use 'bike' not 'back') and be explicit about how bikes help (traffic, health, environment). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

範例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are convenient for short trips and help reduce traffic congestion. Moreover, they are environmentally friendly and good for people's health because cycling is a form of exercise.

× Yes, I have a back when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used the wrong pronoun/word 'back' instead of 'bike' and the tense should be past ('had') to match 'when I was a child'. Use correct noun and past tense for past situations.

× The back color is purple and actually the back is my grandma is my grandma's.

✓ Its color was purple and it belonged to my grandma.

The sentence repeats and misorders phrases ('the back is my grandma is my grandma's') and uses present tense 'is' while the context is past. Use correct possessive structure 'belonged to my grandma' and match past tense 'was' for a past possession. Also replace 'back' with 'bike' (correct noun).

× I use it for three years.

✓ I used it for three years.

The action occurred in the past, so the past tense 'used' is required. Additionally, for completed time periods with numbers, use simple past ('used') rather than present ('use').

× Yes, it is very popular in my country cause back it's so convenient and uh umm, beneficial to the environment and it also can help our to improve.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country because bikes are convenient, beneficial to the environment, and can help improve our health.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('they are' for plural 'bikes'), wrong noun 'back' instead of 'bike', informal 'cause' should be 'because', awkward phrase 'it also can help our to improve' lacks a clear object and verb form. Use plural agreement, correct nouns, and complete phrase 'help improve our health'. Also maintain present simple for general truths.