学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer more directly at the beginning and avoid fillers such as “uh” and unnecessary repetition. Use the correct article and preposition: “an MBA student at Tehran University,” not “a MBA candidate in Tehran University.” You should also explain the connection between your job and your studies more clearly. Make sure the university name is consistent throughout your answers.

範例: I’m both a veterinarian and an MBA student at Tehran University. I decided to study for an MBA because I’m passionate about learning and want to develop my management skills. I believe these skills will help me run a veterinary practice more effectively in the future.

建議: State the university name clearly and use the correct expressions “study at” and “well-ranked university.” Avoid too many fillers and improve the sentence structure by separating the university’s history from its reputation. Also, use a specific and natural description instead of “a great historical building” if you mean that the campus has historic architecture.

範例: I study at Tara University in Tehran. It is one of the oldest universities in Iran, and it has several beautiful historic buildings. It is also a well-ranked institution, so I’m proud to study there.

建議: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two specific reasons. Replace the unnatural and exaggerated phrase “most of the geniuses” with “many high-achieving students” or “some of the brightest students.” Use “the university” and “the center of the campus” instead of “the center of university,” and connect your ideas with a linking word such as “Moreover.”

範例: Yes, it is a very good place to study. Many high-achieving students attend the university, and it offers excellent facilities. Moreover, there is a large, well-equipped library in the center of the campus, which is especially useful during exam periods.

建議: Answer the question directly by saying what changes you would like, rather than saying “I like it.” The phrase “Changes in the weather way” is unclear and should be removed. Correct the grammar in “during exams period” and “there is not free space,” and explain the problem and your proposed solution logically. Use “during exam periods,” “there isn’t enough space,” and “an additional library.”

範例: Yes, I would like the university to make more study space available. During exam periods, the library becomes extremely crowded, and there aren’t enough seats for everyone. Therefore, I think the university should build an additional library or create more quiet study rooms.

建議: Use the correct structure “My future study plans are to…” or “I plan to…,” and avoid repeating “skills.” Explain your plans in a clear sequence: first completing your MBA, then pursuing a PhD, and finally gaining practical experience. Replace “study them at different courses” with “take different courses to develop these skills.”

範例: My main plan is to complete my MBA and eventually pursue a PhD. Before that, I want to gain more practical experience and improve my professional skills. I also plan to take specialized courses at Tehran University because they would complement my academic studies.

× I am a MBA candidate in Tehran University.

✓ I am an MBA candidate at Tehran University.

Use an before MBA because MBA begins with a vowel sound: /ˌem biː ˈeɪ/. The preposition at is normally used for a university or institution.

× I am a MBA candidate in Tehran University.

✓ I am an MBA candidate at Tehran University.

Use at, rather than in, when referring to the institution where someone studies or works. In usually refers to being physically inside a place.

× I am studying in Tara University, which is one of the first universities in Iran.

✓ I am studying at Tara University, which is one of the first universities in Iran.

Use at with the names of educational institutions when describing where someone studies.

× It is a well rank university.

✓ It is a well-ranked university.

Rank must be used as a past participle in the compound adjective well-ranked. The hyphen connects the words because they work together before the noun university.

× There are good facilities here and also a great library in the center of university.

✓ There are good facilities here and also a great library in the center of the university.

Use the definite article the before university because you are referring to a specific university that has already been identified.

× Changes in the weather way.

✓ I would like to make some changes to the way the place is managed.

The original sentence is a fragment because it has no main verb. Add a subject and a verb to form a complete sentence. Also, use changes to the way, not changes in the weather way.

× For example, I can say it would be crowded in during exams period.

✓ For example, I can say that it gets crowded during exam periods.

Do not use in before during. During already expresses the time period. The phrase during exam periods is the natural prepositional phrase for this general situation.

× For example, I can say it would be crowded in during exams period.

✓ For example, I can say that it gets crowded during exam periods.

Use the plural form periods because the statement refers to exam periods in general. Also, exam functions as a noun modifier and normally remains singular in the phrase exam periods.

× There is not free space to study.

✓ There is not enough space to study.

Use enough with an uncountable noun when you mean that the quantity is insufficient. Space is normally uncountable in this meaning, so not enough space is more accurate than not free space.

× My future study plans is, uh, pursue higher education and get my PhD.

✓ My future study plans are to pursue higher education and get my PhD.

The subject plans is plural, so it must take the plural verb are. After are, use the infinitive structure to pursue and get to describe the plans.

× I like to develop my skills and gain some practical skills, which is important.

✓ I like to develop my skills and gain some practical skills, which are important.

The relative pronoun which refers to practical skills, which is plural. Therefore, use the plural verb are, not is.

× I like to study them at different courses in Tehran University.

✓ I like to study them in different courses at Tehran University.

Use in with courses when referring to the content studied within them. Use at with the university as the educational institution.