学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Ответ в целом по теме и содержит дополнительную информацию, но есть много грамматических ошибок и неестественных фраз: “I'm study” → “I study”, “on a high in high school” → “in high school”, “at 11” → “in the 11th grade”, “it's can help” → “it can help”. Не используйте “Great” как случайную вставку. Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте краткое объяснение и причину.

範例: I'm a student in the 11th grade at a high school in Kyiv. I’m also considering doing some babysitting in my free time because it would help me earn a little money and become more independent.

建議: Ответ понятен, но нужно исправить грамматику и выбор слов: “I'm study” → “I study”, “spend more time for preparing” → “spend more time preparing”, а “iOS exam” выглядит как ошибка или неточное название экзамена. Лучше использовать “IELTS exam”, если речь идёт об IELTS. Сначала назовите место учёбы, затем логично объясните, почему вам трудно совмещать школьные занятия с подготовкой.

範例: I study at a high school in Kyiv, where I’m currently in the 11th grade. However, I find it difficult to balance schoolwork with my IELTS preparation because I need to spend quite a lot of time studying at home.

建議: Ответ начинается с “Both”, но вопрос требует чёткого мнения, поэтому лучше сказать “Yes, I think so” или “It has both advantages and disadvantages”. Фраза “A cause or minus or pluses” непонятна и должна быть заменена на конкретные преимущества и недостатки. Добавьте один-два примера, например хороших учителей, удобных классов или большой нагрузки. Избегайте повторения общей фразы “it’s great”.

範例: Yes, overall, I think it’s a good place to study. The teachers are supportive and the school has a friendly atmosphere, although we sometimes have a heavy workload before exams.

建議: Ответ трудно понять из-за неестественных выражений и отсутствия ясной структуры. Вместо “I think a lot of this question” используйте “I’ve thought about this, and I would change…”. Уточните, что именно вы хотите изменить: например, увеличить количество занятий для подготовки к вступительным экзаменам в зарубежные университеты. Дайте прямой ответ и избегайте незаконченных фраз и слов-паразитов.

範例: Yes, I would make one main change. I’d like the school to offer more support and extra classes for students preparing for international university entrance exams. Apart from that, I’m quite satisfied with my school.

建議: Выражена основная идея и есть цель, но нужно исправить несколько формулировок: “pass my IELTS exams” лучше заменить на “get a good IELTS score”, а “have a graduation in the Canadian University of Toronto” — на “graduate from the University of Toronto in Canada” или “study at the University of Toronto”. Свяжите планы с причиной, например желанием получить качественное образование. Фраза “it drives me crazy” разговорная и допустима, но лучше уточнить, что большое количество планов иногда вызывает стресс.

範例: My main plan is to achieve a high IELTS score and apply to the University of Toronto in Canada. I’d like to study there because it offers excellent academic opportunities, although preparing for everything can sometimes be stressful.

× I'm a student and I'm study on a high in high school in the capital of Ukraine at 11.

✓ I'm a student, and I'm studying in the 11th grade at a high school in the capital of Ukraine.

After the verb be, use the present participle form ending in -ing to form the present continuous: I'm studying, not I'm study. Also, use in the 11th grade to describe a student's school level.

× I'm a student and I'm study on a high in high school in the capital of Ukraine at 11.

✓ I'm a student, and I'm studying in the 11th grade at a high school in the capital of Ukraine.

Use the indefinite article a before the singular countable noun school when referring to one school without specifying which one: at a high school.

× Maybe it's can help me to pay for myself.

✓ Maybe I can start a job like babysitting. It can help me support myself.

The singular countable noun job needs the article a: a job. Do not use it's before the modal verb can. The contraction it's means it is, whereas the subject pronoun it is needed here.

× Maybe it's can help me to pay for myself.

✓ Maybe I can start a job like babysitting. It can help me support myself.

A modal verb such as can must be preceded directly by the subject and followed by the base form of the verb: it can help. The form it's can is grammatically incorrect.

× So I'm study in the 11th grade in Kiev in high school, but uh, I would like to spend more time for preparing my iOS exam, so that's hard sometimes to study here.

✓ I'm studying in the 11th grade at a high school in Kyiv, but I would like to spend more time preparing for my IELTS exam, so it's sometimes hard to study here.

Use studying after am to form the present continuous. After spend time, use a gerund without for: spend time preparing.

× So I'm study in the 11th grade in Kiev in high school, but uh, I would like to spend more time for preparing my iOS exam, so that's hard sometimes to study here.

✓ I'm studying in the 11th grade at a high school in Kyiv, but I would like to spend more time preparing for my IELTS exam, so it's sometimes hard to study here.

Use at with a particular school: at a high school. The usual preposition after prepare is for: prepare for an exam.

× So I'm study in the 11th grade in Kiev in high school, but uh, I would like to spend more time for preparing my iOS exam, so that's hard sometimes to study here.

✓ I'm studying in the 11th grade at a high school in Kyiv, but I would like to spend more time preparing for my IELTS exam, so it's sometimes hard to study here.

The adverb sometimes normally comes before the adjective it modifies in this structure: it's sometimes hard. The original position makes the sentence sound unnatural.

× Both, I think every school and even my high school have a like A cause or minus or pluses. So I don't know.

✓ I think every school, including my high school, has grades such as A, C, plus, or minus, so I don't know.

Both refers to two previously mentioned items, but no such pair is identified here. Remove Both or replace it with a clear expression that matches the intended meaning.

× Both, I think every school and even my high school have a like A cause or minus or pluses. So I don't know.

✓ I think every school, including my high school, has grades such as A, C, plus, or minus, so I don't know.

The main subject is every school. Every is singular, so it takes the singular verb has, not the plural verb have.

× MMM, I think a lot of this question, but in my opinion I would like to change some umm preparing to the exam for internationality university but not more.

✓ I think about this question a lot, but in my opinion, I would like to change some of the preparation for the exam for an international university, but nothing more.

Use think about when considering a topic: think about this question. The preposition for is also required after preparation when identifying its purpose: preparation for the exam.

× MMM, I think a lot of this question, but in my opinion I would like to change some umm preparing to the exam for internationality university but not more.

✓ I think about this question a lot, but in my opinion, I would like to change some of the preparation for the exam for an international university, but nothing more.

Use the before preparation when referring to specific preparation. Use an before international university because international begins with a vowel sound.

× I wish to pass my IELTS exams and have a graduation in the Canadian University of Toronto, so I have a lot of plans actually, but sometimes it drives me crazy.

✓ I hope to pass my IELTS exam and graduate from the University of Toronto, so I have a lot of plans, but sometimes it drives me crazy.

IELTS is normally one examination, so use the singular form exam when referring to the test. The phrase pass my IELTS exam is the standard form.

× I wish to pass my IELTS exams and have a graduation in the Canadian University of Toronto, so I have a lot of plans actually, but sometimes it drives me crazy.

✓ I hope to pass my IELTS exam and graduate from the University of Toronto, so I have a lot of plans, but sometimes it drives me crazy.

Use graduate from when naming the institution where someone completes a degree. In is not the appropriate preposition in this context.