学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Answer the question directly and use natural grammatical structures. Say “I do both” rather than “I do both of it,” and use “I’m a second-year philology student” and “I work as an English tutor.” Avoid repeating “tutor” and replace the rhetorical question with a clear statement. Add one specific reason or detail to make the answer more effective.

範例: I do both. I’m a second-year philology student at the National Technical University, and I also work as an English tutor. I really enjoy teaching because helping students improve their language skills has always been a dream of mine.

建議: Give the location directly by saying that you study at the university. The phrase “especially I study” is unnatural; use “where I study English and literature” instead. Add a short supporting detail, such as what you enjoy about your course, and use a linking word to connect the ideas.

範例: I study at the National Technical University, where I’m a second-year philology student. My main subjects are English and literature, which I find particularly interesting because they help me understand both language and culture.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence, such as “Yes, it is.” Use complete sentences and connect the reason with “because.” Avoid repeating “you can” and make the opportunity more specific. For example, mention exchange programs or overseas work opportunities, then explain their result clearly.

範例: Yes, I think it’s a good place to study because the university offers many international opportunities. For example, students can join exchange programs or find work abroad to improve their language skills. As a result, they gain a better understanding of different cultures.

建議: Express the change more tactfully and use correct grammar: “some staff members who work” and “a negative attitude toward students.” State the desired change directly, such as better staff training or improved communication. This will make your answer more precise and natural.

範例: Yes, I would like the university to improve the way some staff members communicate with students. A few of them have a negative attitude, so better customer-service training could make students feel more respected and supported.

建議: Organize your plans in a clear sequence by using “first” and “after that.” Say “in Norway,” not “in the Norway,” and avoid repeating “I want to.” Explain briefly why Norway appeals to you, while keeping the answer within three or four sentences.

範例: First, I plan to graduate from this university. After that, I’d like to work as an English tutor and gain more teaching experience. In the longer term, I hope to work in Norway because I’m interested in its culture and would like to experience life there.

× I do both of it.

✓ I do both.

Both refers to two activities and is used without the pronoun it in this sentence. Do not use both of it here.

× I study second year of philology at National Technology University.

✓ I am in my second year of studying philology at National Technology University.

The original sentence needs a grammatical structure for expressing the year of study. Use I am in my second year of studying followed by the subject.

× I do both of it. I study second year of philology at National Technology University and also I work as a tutor English tutor and I really like what am I doing?

✓ I do both. I am in my second year of studying philology at National Technology University, and I also work as an English tutor. I really like what I am doing.

The sentence contains a repeated noun phrase, an incorrect question structure, and several ideas joined awkwardly. Use a clear sentence structure and change what am I doing to what I am doing because it is an embedded statement, not a direct question.

× I really like what am I doing?

✓ I really like what I am doing.

In an embedded question or statement, the subject comes before the verb. Therefore, use what I am doing, not what am I doing. This should also end with a period because it is part of a statement.

× It was my dream to teach someone.

✓ It has always been my dream to teach others.

The present perfect has always been is more suitable because the dream began in the past and is still true now. The past form was suggests that the dream is no longer true.

× I am a second year philology student at the National Technical University especially I study English and literature.

✓ I am a second-year philology student at the National Technical University. In particular, I study English and literature.

Especially is not placed naturally before the subject and verb in the original sentence. In particular is more appropriate for introducing specific information. Also, second-year should be hyphenated when it functions as a compound adjective before a noun.

× I think so because at our university a lot of opportunities so you can go to another country to improve your language skills and also you can work in other countries.

✓ I think so because there are a lot of opportunities at our university. For example, you can go to another country to improve your language skills, and you can also work in other countries.

The noun phrase a lot of opportunities needs the plural form are with there. Use there are to introduce the existence of plural opportunities. The original sentence also needs to be divided into complete clauses.

× I would like to change some people who works at our university because some of them have bad attitude with our students.

✓ I would like to change some of the people who work at our university because some of them have a bad attitude toward our students.

The relative pronoun who refers to the plural noun people, so the verb must be work, not works. The singular countable noun attitude needs the article a, and the correct preposition after attitude is toward.

× I would like to change some people who works at our university because some of them have bad attitude with our students.

✓ I would like to change some of the people who work at our university because some of them have a bad attitude toward our students.

The preposition toward is used to describe a person's behavior or feelings directed at other people. Attitude with is not the natural combination in this context.

× I want to graduate from this university and after that I am planning to work as a tutor and also I want to work abroad maybe in the Norway because I really like the culture of this country.

✓ I want to graduate from this university, and after that I am planning to work as a tutor. I also want to work abroad, maybe in Norway, because I really like the culture of this country.

Country names such as Norway normally do not take the definite article the. Say in Norway, not in the Norway. The sentence is also clearer when the ideas are separated into shorter clauses.