学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you are a student, then give one or two specific supporting details (what you study and why), using linking words for coherence. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. “visually”).

範例: I am a student preparing for the IELTS exam because I want to study pharmaceutical science in the USA or Canada. I also work part-time to cover my living and travel expenses.

建議: Give a clear location/institution name first, then one or two concise reasons why it is helpful. Use correct phrasing (e.g. “Caroline Education Institute”) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “because” or “which” to connect ideas.

範例: I study at Caroline Education Institute, which offers focused IELTS preparation. It is helpful because the lessons cover speaking practice and the tutors answer all my doubts.

建議: Answer directly and support with specific reasons and examples. Replace vague phrases (“very much very good”, “get rid of from stress”) with precise descriptions of helpful aspects (friendly faculty, clear explanations, supportive administration). Keep to two or three sentences.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the faculty provide clear explanations and individual support. The administration also makes the enrolment and scheduling process straightforward, which reduces stress for students.

建議: Give a direct opinion then one specific suggestion for improvement. Be precise about what the library needs (more up-to-date books, study spaces, or resources). Use linking words like “however” and avoid unclear fragments.

範例: Overall I am satisfied, but I think the library could be improved. For example, they should add more up-to-date textbooks and provide a quiet study area with study guides and sample IELTS materials.

建議: Start with a clear statement of your immediate plan, then state your longer-term goal. Use correct terms (IELTS, not ILS) and concise language. Add one specific detail about why you chose pharmaceutical science to make your answer more personal and convincing.

範例: My immediate plan is to complete the IELTS exam, then apply for undergraduate programs abroad, preferably in the USA or Canada. I plan to study pharmaceutical science because I am interested in drug development and improving patient care.

× Currently I am studying ILS ILS for preparation for going abroad because I want to study in pharmaceutical science in USA or Canada and I am preparing for that and I am currently working part time for my car for covering my expense and for living visually.

✓ Currently I am studying ILS for preparation to go abroad because I want to study pharmaceutical science in the USA or Canada, and I am working part time to cover my car expenses and living costs.

The original sentence is run-on and contains awkward phrasing. Replace 'for preparation for going abroad' with 'for preparation to go abroad' (correct infinitive use). Use 'study pharmaceutical science' (no article) and 'the USA' (definite article with country name). 'Working part time for my car for covering my expense and for living visually' is unclear; change to 'working part time to cover my car expenses and living costs' to express purpose and correct nouns. Also remove repeated 'ILS' and redundant 'I am preparing for that.' Suggestions: break long ideas into clauses, use infinitives for purpose ('to go', 'to cover'), and choose precise nouns ('expenses', 'costs').

× Currently I am pursuing my career ILS preparation from Caroline Education Institute and it is very much useful for me to learn and learn and complements implement speaking related questions and all my doubts are sold here and I am ready for all season.

✓ Currently I am pursuing ILS preparation at Caroline Education Institute, and it is very useful for me to learn and practice speaking-related questions; all my doubts are solved here and I am ready for every session.

Use 'pursuing ILS preparation at' rather than 'pursuing my career ILS preparation from'. Prepositions: use 'at' for institutes. 'Very much useful' should be 'very useful'. 'Learn and learn' is repetition; change to 'learn and practice'. 'Complements implement' is incorrect word choice; 'practice' fits. 'Doubts are sold' is wrong verb; use 'solved'. 'All season' likely means 'every session'. Suggestions: correct prepositions, avoid repetition, use appropriate verbs (solve not sell), and use nouns that match context (session instead of season).

× Yes it is a very much very good place to study and to get your grab your goals and achieve it because the faculties and administration department is very much helpful to get easy to any topic and get rid of from stress and all about that.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to study and to achieve your goals because the faculty and administration department are very helpful in making topics easy to understand and in helping students get rid of stress.

'Faculties' as a plural noun is often used incorrectly; use 'faculty' (collective) or 'the faculty members'. Subject-verb agreement: 'department are' (department is singular but meaning includes staff; better to say 'department are' only if referring to members). Here 'faculty and administration department are' is clearer. 'Very much very good' is redundant; use 'very good'. 'Get your grab your goals and achieve it' is ungrammatical; use 'achieve your goals'. 'Get easy to any topic' should be 'make topics easy to understand'. 'Get rid of from stress' incorrect preposition; use 'get rid of stress' or 'relieve stress'. Suggestions: simplify redundant words, fix word order, correct articles and prepositions, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× There is nothing to change because they are good at their place, but sometimes I feel that library section should improve a little bit should we add some books and useful tips to learn easily and how to get something from it and something like Essie and

✓ There is nothing to change because things are good overall, but sometimes I feel that the library should be improved a little: we should add some books and useful materials to make learning easier and to help students use the library better.

'They are good at their place' incorrectly uses 'they' and 'their' to refer to a place; use 'things are good' or 'the staff are good'. 'Library section' needs the definite article 'the'. Sentence is run-on and contains unclear fragments ('something like Essie'). Replace 'should improve a little bit should we add' with a clear suggestion 'we should add'. Use 'make learning easier' instead of 'to learn easily'. Suggestions: use pronouns that match antecedents, add articles, break run-on sentences into clear clauses, and remove unclear fragments.

× Currently I am planning for ILS exam on my priority, but after completing my ILS I will definitely go to admission application process in abroad preferably USA or Canada in that I will choose pharmaceutical science because I want to study pharmacy and healthcare and explore in the medicines.

✓ Currently I am prioritizing preparation for the ILS exam, but after completing it I will definitely start the admission application process abroad, preferably in the USA or Canada, where I will choose pharmaceutical science because I want to study pharmacy and healthcare and explore medicines.

'Planning for ILS exam on my priority' is awkward; use 'prioritizing preparation for the ILS exam'. 'Go to admission application process in abroad' is incorrect preposition and verb; use 'start the admission application process abroad'. Use 'in the USA' (definite article). 'Explore in the medicines' is incorrect; use 'explore medicines' or 'research medicines'. Tense: future plan correctly expressed with 'will start' and 'will choose'. Suggestions: correct prepositions ('abroad' used without 'in'), use definite articles for country names ('the USA'), and choose proper verbs for actions ('start the application process').