学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make the response more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and small grammar errors (e.g., "looking forward to graduating" not "to graduate"). Use linking words such as "because" or "so" purposefully.

範例: I'm a year 13 student, so I'm currently finishing my final year at school. I've studied here for 13 years, which makes me feel sad about leaving because I've grown up with my teachers and friends.

建議: Give a direct topic sentence about the school, then provide one or two clear, specific details. Use accurate vocabulary ("activities", "near my school", name placeholders less awkwardly) and link ideas with words like "for example". Avoid vague phrases.

範例: I study at Matraday School, which is a private school. For example, there are several shopping malls and leisure activities nearby, such as a karaoke centre and a large shopping complex, so I enjoy spending time around school.

建議: Structure your answer: state clearly that it is a good place, then give concise, specific reasons. Correct minor errors ("aforementioned" is unnecessary; "students pay for the facilities"; remove filler words). Use linking words like "because" and "also" to connect reasons.

範例: Yes, it's a great place to study because the school has excellent facilities and supportive teachers. Also, many of my classmates speak English, which helps me improve my language skills.

建議: Answer the question directly with one or two concrete suggestions for change (e.g., better career guidance, more practical labs). Avoid vague or repetitive statements and correct grammar ("places where study actually make changes" → "places that bring real improvement"). Use linking words to explain reasons.

範例: Yes. I would like better career guidance and more practical workshops at school because these would help students prepare for university and future jobs. If the school offers clearer support, studying would feel more worthwhile.

建議: Begin with a clear statement of your plan, then give specific details and a brief reason. Use formal phrasing ("I would like" instead of "wanna") and correct small grammar issues ("after I graduate"). Limit to two to three sentences.

範例: I plan to become a veterinarian and ideally study veterinary medicine in the United Kingdom if my parents agree. I hope to specialise as an exotic animal veterinarian because I love working with birds.

× I am currently a student, I am a year 13 student, which is actually my last year studying here and I'm really sad because I've been studying in this school for 13 years now.

✓ I am currently a Year 13 student, which is my last year here, and I'm really sad because I have been studying at this school for 13 years.

Tense and preposition use: 'I've been studying in this school' uses present perfect continuous correctly but uses wrong preposition 'in' for 'school' — use 'at'. Also wording streamlined: 'which is actually my last year studying here' is wordy; use 'which is my last year here'. Use 'have been studying' to convey duration up to now.

× So yeah, this is my last year, so I'm not really ready for it and I'm not looking forward to graduate that much.

✓ So yeah, this is my last year, so I'm not really ready for it and I'm not looking forward to graduating that much.

Gerund after 'look forward to': The phrase 'looking forward to' must be followed by a noun or gerund, so use 'graduating' rather than the base verb 'graduate'.

× I'm currently studying at Matraday school.

✓ I'm currently studying at Matraday School.

Capitalization and article: School names are proper nouns so 'School' is capitalized. No article needed if using official name. Preposition 'at' is correct.

× It's a private school and there are a lot of famous malls in activity to do near my school.

✓ It's a private school and there are a lot of popular malls and activities near my school.

Word choice and preposition: 'famous malls in activity to do' is incorrect English. Replace with 'popular malls and activities' and use 'near my school' for location.

× For example, there is central **** loom or there are karaoke near my school.

✓ For example, there is Central **** Loom, and there are karaoke venues near my school.

Subject-verb agreement and count nouns: 'karaoke' as an activity cannot be 'there are karaoke'; use 'karaoke venues' or 'karaoke places'. Also proper noun capitalization for the mall.

× So I actually really enjoyed my school.

✓ So I actually really enjoy my school.

Tense consistency: The student is talking about current feelings about their school, so present simple 'enjoy' is appropriate rather than past 'enjoyed'.

× Aforementioned, it's a private school so the tuition fees are kind of high and a lot of students are like paying for the facilities in the school.

✓ As mentioned, it's a private school so the tuition fees are quite high and many students pay for the school facilities.

Use of phrase and pronouns: 'Aforementioned' is formal and misused; 'As mentioned' is better. 'A lot of students are like paying' is colloquial; use 'many students pay'. Also 'facilities in the school' can be 'school facilities'.

× So the facilities in the schools are really good and the teachers are so supportive.

✓ So the facilities in the school are really good and the teachers are very supportive.

Plural noun consistency: 'schools' should match singular 'the school' mentioned earlier. Also 'so supportive' is colloquial; 'very supportive' is clearer.

× And also my friends are talking in English.

✓ Also, my friends speak English.

Progressive tense unnecessary: 'are talking in English' suggests at this moment; general habit uses simple present 'speak'. Also remove redundant 'And' and use comma.

× So I feel like it it helps me improve my English skills.

✓ So I feel like it helps me improve my English skills.

Typo and pronoun reference: Duplicate 'it' is a typo. 'It' correctly refers to the environment; keep single 'it'.

× Yes, of course. I feel like everybody studies because they want to improve themselves.

✓ Yes, of course. I feel that everyone studies because they want to improve themselves.

Word choice: 'everybody' is acceptable but 'everyone' is slightly more formal. 'I feel like' is conversational; 'I feel that' is clearer in formal responses.

× And I really want to study in a good place because I want to get into a good university and have a good job and pursue A and have a good future, to be honest.

✓ I really want to study in a good place because I want to get into a good university, have a good job, and build a successful future.

Redundancy and unclear phrase 'pursue A': remove repetition ('good' repeated) and unclear fragment. Use parallel structure for list of goals.

× So I feel like I really want to study in places where study actually make changes because if it doesn't make any changes, so there's no reason why you have to study.

✓ So I feel that I want to study in places where education actually makes a difference, because if it doesn't, there's no reason to study.

Grammar and noun use: 'places where study actually make changes' has noun-verb agreement error; use 'education makes a difference'. Remove redundant 'so' and streamline the sentence.

× Really want to become a veterinarian.

✓ I really want to become a veterinarian.

Sentence without subject or verb: The original lacks the subject 'I'. Add 'I' to form a complete sentence.

× Actually if my mother allowed me, I really wanna apply for the veterinary school in United Kingdom.

✓ Actually, if my mother allows me, I really want to apply to veterinary school in the United Kingdom.

Tense and article: Use present 'allows' for current permission possibility. Use 'apply to' not 'apply for' when referring to applying to a school. Include 'the' before 'United Kingdom'. Avoid 'wanna' in formal speech; use 'want to'.

× And also I feel like I wanna be a veterinarian after I graduated and become a an exotic veterinarian because I love birds so much.

✓ I also feel like I want to be a veterinarian after I graduate and become an exotic veterinarian because I love birds so much.

Tense agreement: Use simple present 'graduate' for a future event after which another future will occur: 'after I graduate' (not 'after I graduated'). Remove duplicate article 'a an' and avoid 'wanna'.