学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence ("I'm a student at a language school"), correct tense and articles, avoid filler words (uh) and reduce redundancy. Then add one specific reason why you study (e.g. to prepare for work abroad). Use one or two short supporting details linked with because/so to make it coherent.

範例: I'm a student at a language school. I'm studying intensive English because I want to prepare for a career in another country, so I practice speaking and take exam preparation classes.

建議: Give a clear statement of the place, use correct grammar and concise description. Start with "I study at...", then add one or two specific and relevant details (location, facilities, student community) linked with because/and. Avoid unclear words and incorrect forms.

範例: I study at Kansai Lakewood School, which is in the heart of the city. It has excellent facilities, such as a modern library and student lounges, and a friendly student community.

建議: Answer directly and correct verb forms and articles. Use one topic sentence ("Yes, it is.") then give one or two specific reasons, linked with because/for example. Use precise vocabulary (quiet, focused atmosphere) and avoid repetition.

範例: Yes, it is. The school provides a very calm and focused atmosphere, especially in the art library, which is quiet and well-equipped for studying.

建議: Be specific and structured: state the change you want in one sentence, then explain why and how it would help, using linking words (because/so). Use correct vocabulary (exam season, closing time) and avoid hesitations. Mention a feasible suggestion (longer opening hours or extended access) and a brief reason.

範例: If I could change one thing, I would extend the library opening hours during the exam season. Because it closes at 5:00 PM and becomes very crowded, staying open later would give students more time and less pressure to study.

建議: Give a clear, grammatically correct statement of your plan. Start with "In the future..." or "I plan to..." then specify the field and next step (e.g. apply for an engineering degree). Add one short reason or detail using because/so. Avoid repeating names or fillers.

範例: In the future, I plan to enroll in an engineering degree program. I want to study engineering because I'm interested in design and hope to work on technical projects abroad.

× Uh, I'm currently a language school program student, so for the day I'm quite busy learning language day by day.

✓ Uh, I'm currently a language school program student, so these days I'm quite busy learning languages day by day.

Article and count noun issues: 'for the day' is wrong; use 'these days' to indicate current period. 'language' should be plural 'languages' when speaking generally. Suggest using 'these days' and plural noun for clarity.

× Is help me to open my career in another country.

✓ It will help me to start my career in another country.

Sentence structure and missing subject: The original lacks a proper subject and verb form. Use 'It will help me' or 'This helps me' and 'start my career' is a natural collocation.

× Are a study at the Kansai Lakewood school so it's located in the heart of the city so that Kapa is really fantastic for floor is motor facility and the student community.

✓ I study at Kansai Lakewood School, which is located in the heart of the city, so the campus is really fantastic for facilities and the student community.

Multiple structure and word choice errors: 'Are a study' should be 'I study'; 'so that Kapa' unclear—interpreted as 'the campus'; 'floor is motor facility' is incorrect—use 'facilities'. Combine clauses with relative pronoun 'which' and clear nouns.

× Yeah, absolutely. The school offer a the school offer incredibly good atmosphere, especially their art library which provide completely quiet and the focus atmosphere.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. The school offers an incredibly good atmosphere, especially their art library, which provides a completely quiet and focused atmosphere.

Subject-verb agreement and article/plural issues: 'school' (singular) requires 'offers' (third person singular). Remove duplicate phrase. Use article 'an' before vowel sound 'incredibly'. 'Provide' must be 'provides'. 'Focus' should be adjective 'focused'.

× So if there if I have a chance to change anything, I would like to change the library permission for the student during the exist session Exam season.

✓ If I had the chance to change anything, I would change the library opening hours for students during the exam season.

Conditional and word choice errors: 'So if there if I have' is redundant; use second conditional 'If I had the chance' because hypothetical. 'Library permission' unclear—use 'library opening hours' or 'access'. 'Exist session Exam season' should be 'exam season'.

× Uh, the library is already too crowded because it's close as 5:00 PM, so I want to have more time.

✓ Uh, the library is already too crowded because it closes at 5:00 PM, so I would like it to be open longer.

Verb tense/form and word choice: 'it's close as 5:00 PM' is incorrect; use 'it closes at 5:00 PM'. 'I want to have more time' is vague—use 'I would like it to be open longer' for politeness and clarity.

× Uh, Antonio, Antonio future, uh, I'm looking forward to open my engineering program.

✓ In the future, I'm looking forward to starting my engineering program.

Verb form after 'look forward to' requires gerund: use 'starting' not 'to open'. 'Antonio, Antonio' appears to be filler or misheard; replace with 'In the future' to match context.