学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and correct grammar; give one clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Fix articles, plural/singular and verb forms. Use linking words like “because” or “so” correctly and avoid repeating the same idea.

範例: I am currently a student studying for a bachelor’s degree in Human Resource Management. I enjoy the course because it teaches practical skills such as recruitment and workplace communication, which should lead to good employment opportunities in the future.

建議: Open with a direct answer about the place, then add one specific supporting detail. Correct tense and grammar (e.g., 'I am interested' not 'I always interested') and avoid repeating degree information already given. Use a linking word like 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas.

範例: I study at Government Rajendra College in Fordipur. I enjoy the Human Resource Management course there because the faculty offers practical examples of workplace behaviour and career guidance, which helps me prepare for future jobs.

建議: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'and'. Correct subject-verb agreement and verb forms (e.g., 'teachers are', 'I also like', 'help me learn'). Avoid vague phrasing like 'very good that'.

範例: Yes, it is a great place to study because the teachers are friendly and supportive, and the campus environment is calm and focused. I also like the group projects because they let me learn different approaches from classmates.

建議: Answer directly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Give one clear change and two specific details explaining why. Use linking words such as 'so' or 'because' to connect the reason to the change.

範例: I would like a separate study area in my room with a bookshelf and a study table by the window so that I can use natural light and concentrate better. This would reduce distractions and make it easier to organise my coursework.

建議: Give a clear, concise plan: state immediate status then specific next step. Fix grammatical errors and avoid unclear phrases like 'study in approach'. Explain briefly how the plan will help with concrete benefits. Use linking words such as 'after that' and 'so' or 'because'.

範例: I am in my final year of a bachelor’s in Human Resource Management. After graduating, I plan to pursue a master’s degree in HR to gain advanced skills in talent management and improve my chances of getting a managerial role in a reputable company.

× I am pursuing my bachelor degree in Human Research and Management.

✓ I am pursuing my bachelor's degree in Human Resources and Management.

The phrase needs a possessive form 'bachelor's degree' and the field name is 'Human Resources and Management'. Also use plural 'Resources' for the standard department name. Use of possessive degree is required for correct noun phrase structure.

× I find this subject interesting because it offers various Employment Opportunity and help me to improve useful skill.

✓ I find this subject interesting because it offers various employment opportunities and helps me improve useful skills.

Use plural 'opportunities' and lowercase common nouns. The verb must agree with singular subject 'it', so use 'helps'. Use correct infinitive/verb pattern 'helps me improve' (not 'help me to improve' here) and pluralize 'skills'.

× Currently I am studying at Government Rajendra College in Fordipur.

✓ Currently I am studying at Government Rajendra College in Fordipur.

No grammatical change needed; sentence correctly uses present continuous for ongoing action. (Included for completeness; no error under the provided list.)

× I always interested to learn about employment opportunities and workplace behavior.

✓ I am always interested in learning about employment opportunities and workplace behavior.

The stative adjective 'interested' requires the verb 'to be' ('am') and the preposition 'in' followed by a gerund 'learning'. This fixes sentence structure and collocation.

× It also helped me to improve.

✓ It also helps me improve my skills.

Tense should match context (present course benefits ongoing), so use present 'helps'. Add an object 'my skills' to clarify what is improved; remove unnecessary 'to' for 'helps me improve'.

× Absolutely, the college and the teacher is very friendly.

✓ Absolutely, the college and the teachers are very friendly.

Compound subject 'the college and the teachers' is plural and requires plural verb 'are'. Also use plural 'teachers' if referring generally; keep agreement between subject and verb.

× The environment is very good that you can learn and improve your skill.

✓ The environment is very good, so you can learn and improve your skills.

Use a conjunction 'so' to link clauses; 'your skill' should be plural 'your skills' for general ability. The comma improves sentence flow.

× I've also like working on group project because they help me from learn from other.

✓ I also like working on group projects because they help me learn from others.

Use simple present 'like' with 'I' (not 'I've like'). Pluralize 'group projects' and 'others'. Remove erroneous 'from' before 'learn' and use correct verb pattern 'help me learn'.

× I usually study in my bedroom, uh, but I would like to make my room a little bigger.

✓ I usually study in my bedroom, but I would like to make my room a little bigger.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity; sentence otherwise correct. No change to verb forms.

× I would uh, want to uh, have a separate study area, uh, added with a bookshelf and study table by the window so I can use natural light and concentrate better.

✓ I would like to have a separate study area with a bookshelf and a study table by the window so I can use natural light and concentrate better.

Use 'would like to have' instead of 'would want to have' for politeness and natural phrasing. Remove filler words 'uh'. Use 'with' rather than 'added with' and include articles 'a bookshelf' and 'a study table'.

× Now I am pursue my bachelor degree in Human Research and Management and I am in my final year.

✓ I am now pursuing my bachelor's degree in Human Resources and Management, and I am in my final year.

Use present continuous 'am pursuing' with -ing form 'pursuing'. Include possessive 'bachelor's degree' and correct field name 'Human Resources'. Comma before conjunction improves readability.

× After that I want to study in approach and complete my master's degree.

✓ After that, I want to continue my studies and complete my master's degree.

The phrase 'study in approach' is incorrect. Use 'continue my studies' to express further education. Include comma after 'After that' for clarity and use correct noun 'master's degree'.

× It would help me to work in better place and give me better opportunities.

✓ It would help me get a job in a better place and give me better opportunities.

Use 'help me get' for natural collocation; include article 'a' before 'better place' or rephrase 'a better workplace'/'a better company'. This makes the intended meaning clearer and corrects verb collocation.