学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct small grammar issues (full-time, most of the time) and keep within 2–3 sentences. Add one brief specific detail to support your answer.

範例: I'm a full-time student at Albuquerque International University. At the moment I’m concentrating entirely on my studies, so I spend most of my time attending lectures and studying in the library.

建議: Give a clear direct answer and one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler. Mention the city or a characteristic to make it more informative and natural.

範例: I study at Al Bukhari International University in Alor Setar, Malaysia. It’s a very beautiful campus with lots of green space, so I enjoy studying there.

建議: Be specific and coherent. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then explain one or two clear reasons using linking words (because, for example). Avoid unclear comparisons and fix grammar (e.g., “is a good place” → “is a good place to study”).

範例: Yes, it’s a good place to study because the campus is attractive and peaceful. For example, some buildings are inspired by Mughal architecture, which creates a calm atmosphere that helps me concentrate.

建議: Answer the question directly (say whether you would like changes), then give one specific suggestion or say no changes needed. Remove repetitions and fillers, use linking words (because, so) and correct grammar (e.g., “it is quiet and comfortable”).

範例: I wouldn’t change much because I like the quiet library, which helps me focus. However, I would add more comfortable study chairs because that would make long study sessions less tiring.

建議: Give a clear, concise plan with reasons. Start with a topic sentence about your plan, then add one specific reason and perhaps a brief detail about what you hope to study. Avoid repetition and fillers.

範例: In the future I plan to continue my studies in Egypt because I want to study Islamic theology in depth. I hope to join a university there that offers courses on religious history and Arabic to improve my understanding.

× Currently I'm a full time student in Albuquerque International University.

✓ Currently I'm a full-time student at Albuquerque International University.

Use present continuous for current status (I'm). The adjective 'full-time' should be hyphenated when used before a noun. Use preposition 'at' for institutions and correct university name if needed. Suggestion: write 'I'm a full-time student at [University]'.

× I decided to focus uh entire entirely on my academic journey for now.

✓ I have decided to focus entirely on my academic journey for now.

Use present perfect 'have decided' to indicate a recent decision affecting the present. Remove duplicated fillers 'uh' and duplicate words 'entire entirely'. 'Entirely' correctly modifies 'focus'. Suggestion: avoid filler words and duplication.

× So most of time I go to the library and lectures.

✓ So most of the time I go to the library and attend lectures.

Include the definite article 'the' in the phrase 'most of the time'. Use the verb 'attend' to collocate with 'lectures'. Suggestion: 'most of the time I go to the library and attend lectures.'

× I study in Al Bukhari International University located in Malaysia.

✓ I study at Al Bukhari International University, which is located in Malaysia.

Use preposition 'at' with institutions. Add a relative clause for clarity and include a comma. Suggestion: 'I study at [University], which is located in [country].'

× Alosta, Malaysia.

✓ Alosta, Malaysia.

This fragment may be a location tag and is acceptable as a short answer; no grammatical change needed unless intended to be full sentence. Suggestion: if used as a full sentence, write 'It is in Alosta, Malaysia.'

× Uh, this place is very beautiful and I like it.

✓ This place is very beautiful and I like it.

Remove filler 'Uh'. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct. Suggestion: avoid filler words in formal speaking.

× Of course, from my perspective, it is good place because, umm, my university surrounded by a beautiful place like, uh, in uh, Taj Mahal.

✓ Of course, from my perspective, it is a good place because my university is surrounded by beautiful buildings inspired by the Taj Mahal.

Need indefinite article 'a' before 'good place'. Use passive with auxiliary 'is' in 'is surrounded'. Remove unnecessary fillers 'umm' and 'uh'. Clarify meaning: 'surrounded by beautiful buildings inspired by the Taj Mahal' is more natural. Use 'the' before 'Taj Mahal'.

× How inspired in touch some, some building inspired by Taj Mahal, some building inspired by.

✓ Some buildings are inspired by the Taj Mahal; others have different inspirations.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Use plural 'buildings' and passive 'are inspired by'. Complete the contrast 'others have different inspirations' to avoid trailing 'inspired by.' Suggestion: plan sentence before speaking to avoid repetition.

× Umm, in my university I really like go to the library because it place is very quiet and not noisy and it this place is very cool and make me feel uh, convenient for study and make me make me care focus on study better.

✓ At my university I really like going to the library because the place is very quiet and comfortable, which helps me focus on my studies better.

Use gerund 'going' after 'like'. Use definite article 'the' before 'place'. Replace awkward 'not noisy' and 'very cool' with 'quiet and comfortable'. Use 'helps me focus on my studies' for correct verb and noun forms. Remove repeated words and fillers. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and correct verb forms.

× In the future, now I, I am studying in Malaysia, but in the future I want to, I want to change uh, country.

✓ At the moment I am studying in Malaysia, but in the future I want to move to another country to study.

Use 'at the moment' for current situation. Avoid repeating 'in the future' and fillers. Use 'move to another country to study' for clarity and correct verb choice. Suggestion: streamline timing expressions and avoid repetition.

× Like I want to go to study in Egypt because I want to learn about religion more.

✓ I want to go to Egypt to study because I want to learn more about religion.

Use 'go to Egypt to study' rather than 'go to study in Egypt' for natural word order. Place 'more' after 'learn' as 'learn more about'. Suggestion: use natural infinitive constructions: 'go to [place] to [verb]'.

× And yes, I want to learn about religion.

✓ Yes, I want to learn more about religion.

Add 'more' to avoid repetition of previous sentence and to express desire for deeper study. The sentence is otherwise fine; avoid unnecessary short fragments. Suggestion: combine with previous sentence for fluency.