学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise, correct grammar and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly add one or two supporting details. Avoid wrong verbs (use "doing" or "studying" not "posting") and unnecessary phrases. Also correct college name if needed and keep within 3–4 sentences.

範例: I am currently an undergraduate student studying Business Administration at Bukhara University. I attend lectures and seminars, complete assignments, and work on research projects for my courses. I usually plan my week in advance so I can balance classes and project work.

建議: Give a clear, simple answer naming the university and its location. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases and past-perfect mistakes. Use present simple for current study and keep supporting detail specific (city or campus).

範例: I am studying at Pukara University, which is located in the Pukara Cascade District. The campus is fairly large and has good facilities for students, including a main library and several lecture halls.

建議: Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "also". Avoid repetition and comparative errors. Use natural adjectives and correct sentence structure.

範例: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because it has a quiet and peaceful atmosphere. Also, the large library provides a comfortable space where students can concentrate on their work.

建議: State one clear change and explain briefly why with a specific example. Use correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and linking words like "because" or "so". Offer a realistic improvement.

範例: Yes. I would like the university to improve sound insulation in classrooms because they are close to a busy road and traffic noise from trucks and buses often interrupts lectures. Better windows or quieter classrooms would help students focus.

建議: Give a clear, direct plan: state your immediate plan and future goal. Use correct tense and collocations ("do a master's degree" or "study for an MBA"). Be specific about why you want the degree and what you hope to achieve.

範例: I am completing my Bachelor's degree in Business Administration, and in the future I plan to study for an MBA. I want to gain advanced management skills and international exposure so I can pursue business opportunities in multinational companies.

× Currently I am a student and I am posting my bachelor degree from Bukhara University in Business Administrative.

✓ Currently I am a student and I am pursuing my bachelor's degree at Bukhara University in Business Administration.

The verb 'posting' is incorrect in this context; use 'pursuing' for studying toward a degree. 'Bachelor degree' needs possessive form 'bachelor's degree'. Use preposition 'at' for institutions and correct field name 'Business Administration'. These changes keep present continuous to show an ongoing action.

× So I have a visit schedule like attending my classes, completing assignments and doing research on project.

✓ I have a schedule that includes attending classes, completing assignments, and doing research for projects.

The phrase 'have a visit schedule like' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'a schedule that includes' and parallel gerunds 'attending, completing, and doing'. Use 'for projects' or 'on a project' depending on meaning. This fixes sentence structure and parallelism.

× I had completed my +2 from UH International College and now I'm currently pushing my bachelor degree from Pukara University which is located in the Pukara Cascade District in the Pukara UH Scenic Basti Dungeon pattern.

✓ I completed my +2 at UH International College, and now I am pursuing my bachelor's degree at Pukara University, which is located in the Pukara Cascade District.

Use simple past 'completed' for a finished action rather than past perfect 'had completed' when no prior past reference exists. Replace 'pushing' with 'pursuing'. Use 'at' for colleges/universities. Remove unclear extra phrases ('UH Scenic Basti Dungeon pattern') to make location clear. Use possessive 'bachelor's degree'.

× I would say yes because it has very quiet and peaceful atmosphere and also there is a big library where students can stay quite and concentrate on their study.

✓ I would say yes because it has a very quiet and peaceful atmosphere, and there is a large library where students can stay quietly and concentrate on their studies.

Add article 'a' before 'very quiet'. Use 'large' instead of 'big' for formality. Use adverb 'quietly' (not 'quite') to modify 'stay'. Use plural 'studies'. These corrections fix adjective/adverb misuse and article omission.

× So I would say is the better and best place to study and concentrate on your work.

✓ So I would say it is one of the best places to study and concentrate on your work.

The original lacks subject 'it' and uses awkward comparative/superlative 'the better and best'. Use 'one of the best places' for natural expression. This corrects article and comparative usage and sentence structure.

× Yes, I would say the class should be maintained in a way that it we can concentrate on our work and study because the class are near the roads so due to whenever there is a big truck or buses travel through.

✓ Yes, I would say the classrooms should be arranged so that we can concentrate on our work and study, because the classrooms are near the road and noise from trucks or buses can be distracting.

Replace 'the class' with plural 'classrooms' and 'maintained' with 'arranged' for clarity. Remove extra pronoun 'it'. Use 'are' to agree with plural. Use 'near the road' (singular) or 'near roads'; 'noise from trucks or buses' is natural. Fix article and subject-verb agreement and sentence flow.

× Will I'm cordingly pushing my bachelor degree in business administrative uh, sectors.

✓ Well, I am currently pursuing my bachelor's degree in Business Administration.

'Will' is incorrect; use 'Well' as a filler. 'I'm cordingly pushing' is ungrammatical—use 'I am currently pursuing'. Use 'bachelor's degree' and proper field name 'Business Administration'. This fixes sentence structure and verb choice.

× So in the future I would like to do master in MBA so that I can grab the business opportunities in the future in international uh, sector.

✓ In the future I would like to do a master's degree (an MBA) so that I can pursue international business opportunities.

Add article 'a' before 'master's degree'. Use parenthetical 'an MBA' or 'a Master of Business Administration'. Replace informal 'grab' with 'pursue' and simplify 'in the future' repetition. Use 'international business opportunities' for clarity and correct noun phrase. This corrects modal phrasing and article use.