学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and produce a clear topic sentence, then add one short supporting detail. Reduce hesitations and correct basic grammar (e.g., "I'm in my final year studying law"). Use linking words if adding more information (e.g., "because" or "so").

範例: I'm a student. I'm in my final year studying law at university, so I'm quite busy with coursework and internships at the moment.

建議: Give a direct answer then add a brief specific detail about the program. Avoid repetition (e.g., "Civil Civil law").

範例: I study law at Hanoi University, and my major is civil law, which focuses on contracts, property and family law.

建議: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give one or two coherent reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and mispronounced words. Use linking words like "because" and "and" to connect ideas.

範例: Yes, definitely. It's very interesting because we learn how the law is applied to real-life situations, and I enjoy discussing different points of view and finding solutions to legal problems.

建議: Answer directly and give one specific suggestion or state clearly why no changes are needed. Fix grammar (e.g., "It's a good place to learn"), avoid vague phrasing, and keep to one or two sentences.

範例: No, I don't think so. It's a good place to learn a lot, and I particularly enjoy the practical case discussions that make the courses engaging.

建議: Give a clear topic sentence about your plans, then add one specific detail about how you will achieve them (e.g., further study, internships). Correct grammar and avoid repetition.

範例: In the future I want to become a lawyer. I plan to complete a legal internship and then sit the bar exam because my major offers many career opportunities in litigation and advisory roles.

× I'm a student. I'm still, I'm studying law at law university. I mean a final year. I'm so quite busy studies at the moment.

✓ I'm a student. I'm still studying law at the law university. I mean I'm in my final year. I'm quite busy with my studies at the moment.

Errors: unnecessary 'still' placement and extra commas, missing articles ('the law university'), missing verb 'am' in 'I'm in my final year', incorrect word order 'busy studies' and missing preposition 'with'. Suggestion: Use 'still' directly before the verb if needed ('I'm still studying'), include definite article if referring to a specific university ('the law university' or better 'the Law University' if proper name), use 'in my final year' to indicate year, and use 'busy with my studies' for natural collocation.

× I'm so quite busy studies at the moment.

✓ I'm quite busy with my studies at the moment.

The adverbs 'so' and 'quite' should not be combined; choose one. 'Busy' needs the preposition 'with' before 'my studies'. Suggestion: Use 'quite' or 'very' but not both together, and include 'with' to link 'busy' and 'studies'.

× I'm studying law at Hanoi University and my major is Civil Civil law.

✓ I'm studying law at Hanoi University and my major is Civil Law.

Repetition 'Civil Civil' is an error and 'Civil Law' should be capitalized as a field of study; no article needed before the major. Suggestion: Remove the duplicate word and capitalize properly.

× Yes, definitely. I finally go kiss the most interesting because I can learn how the law is applied to real life situations.

✓ Yes, definitely. I find it the most interesting because I can learn how the law is applied to real-life situations.

Original contains nonsense words 'finally go kiss' and wrong structure. Replace with 'I find it the most interesting' to express opinion. 'Real life' should be hyphenated as 'real-life' when used as a compound adjective. Suggestion: Use 'I find it' + adjective to state opinion and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I also enjoy discussing different points of view and finding solution to legal problems.

✓ I also enjoy discussing different points of view and finding solutions to legal problems.

'Solution' should be plural 'solutions' to match 'legal problems' or use 'a solution to legal problems'. Suggestion: Ensure number agreement between nouns.

× Now I don't think so. It's a good place for a student learn a lot of very knowledge and is now I find a legal case in the most interesting.

✓ No, I don't think so. It's a good place for students to learn a lot of useful knowledge, and I find legal cases very interesting.

Multiple issues: 'Now' is awkward; 'a student learn' needs infinitive 'for a student to learn' or plural 'students to learn'; 'very knowledge' is incorrect collocation—use 'useful knowledge'; 'is now I find a legal case in the most interesting' is ungrammatical and reordered. Suggestion: Use 'students to learn', choose appropriate adjective for 'knowledge', and simplify the second clause to 'I find legal cases very interesting'.

× In your future I want to be a lawyer and is also my hobby now and I think I think my major have a lot of many career for opportunities.

✓ In the future I want to be a lawyer; it is also my hobby now, and I think my major offers many career opportunities.

Errors: 'In your future' should be 'In the future'; 'is also my hobby now' needs a subject 'it' and a linking verb; repetition 'I think I think'; 'my major have' should be 'my major offers' (subject-verb agreement) and 'a lot of many career for opportunities' is redundant and ungrammatical—use 'many career opportunities' or 'a lot of career opportunities'. Suggestion: Use correct time phrase, include subjects and verbs, avoid repetition, ensure subject-verb agreement and concise quantifiers.