学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 内容相关但句子冗长且有语法错误与词汇使用不当。回答应更直接地表明身份，随后用一两句简洁说明原因或计划，避免重复“high school”以及不准确的短语（如“obtain more professionals”）。注意语法（which means → which means that / so → ，so）和名词搭配（certificates or licences）。

範例: I'm a final-year high school student. I'm studying hard and aiming to earn certificates and take part in competitions to strengthen my university applications.

建議: 回答信息完整但句子过长且有主谓一致与冠词错误。开头直接回答学校名字更自然，随后用一两句具体支持理由并使用连接词（because / and）。注意单复数（our school has / well-equipped science labs）。

範例: I study at Washington High School in Taichung. It's a great place because the teachers are friendly and supportive, and the school has excellent facilities such as a modern library and well-equipped science labs.

建議: 表达上有逻辑但语言不自然，时态和句子结构错误较多。避免使用口语化过强的连接词（Yet it is besides...），应先给主题句然后用具体例子支持。时态需一致（I participated / they cheered me up）。注意代词和短语搭配（cheered me up / which boosted my confidence）。

範例: Yes, it's a very good place to study because of both the facilities and the supportive teachers. For example, when I lost a speech contest last year, my teachers comforted and encouraged me, which boosted my confidence.

建議: 观点明确但有数字写法与语法错误（current 1 → current one；have → has；more healthier → healthier/more healthy）。回答可以更简洁并给出具体改进建议或理由，提高说服力。

範例: Yes. I'd like the school to renovate the cafeteria because the current one is old and has hygiene issues. Upgrading it would allow the school to offer healthier, more affordable meals for students.

建議: 内容清晰但句子冗长且有词汇搭配不当（apply an ideal university → apply to my ideal university；obtain certificates fine）。建议先给主题句，再列举一两项具体计划并使用连接词，避免重复短语“more competitive / great chance”。

範例: As it's my final year, I plan to participate in more extracurricular events and earn certificates in subjects like English and science to strengthen my application to my ideal university.

× I have to study hard and try to obtain more professionals, certificates or license in order to make myself more competitive so that I can have the chance to apply to an ideal university in the future.

✓ I have to study hard and try to obtain more professional certificates or licenses in order to make myself more competitive so that I can have the chance to apply to an ideal university in the future.

此句中“professionals, certificates or license”用词和单复数搭配错误。1) “professional”应为形容词修饰“certificates”，不能用名词“professionals”。2) “license”应与“certificates”一致使用复数形式“licenses”。建议把“professionals”改为形容词“professional”，并将“license”改为复数“licenses”。

× I'm studying in the high school named Washington High School which is located in Taichung and I think that it's a great place to study in because the teachers are friendly and supportive and also our school have a lot of great facilities like a modern library and a well equipped science labs.

✓ I'm studying at Washington High School, which is located in Taichung, and I think it's a great place to study because the teachers are friendly and supportive and also our school has a lot of great facilities like a modern library and well-equipped science labs.

原句存在多处问题：1) 搭配问题：英语通常说“study at a school”而不是“study in the high school”；2) 冗余和冠词问题：不需要冠词“the”在校名之前；3) 主谓不一致：“our school have”应为“our school has”；4) 形容词顺序/连接：“well equipped science labs”应加连字符“well-equipped”或作为复合形容词。建议按上面的改写。

× the teachers are super friendly and supportive too. To give you an example, last year I have participated in a speech contest and I lost. I was really upset by my teachers just cheers me up and tell me that it's OK, which gains my confidence.

✓ The teachers are super friendly and supportive too. To give you an example, last year I participated in a speech contest and I lost. I was really upset, but my teachers cheered me up and told me that it's OK, which restored my confidence.

此段有多处语法时态和主谓问题：1) 过去发生的事要用一般过去时，不能用“have participated”与“last year”一起，应改为“participated”；2) “my teachers just cheers me up and tell me”主语复数应对应动词复数形式且时态为过去，“cheers”应为过去式“cheered”，“tell”应为过去式“told”；3) “upset by my teachers just cheers me up”语义混乱，需加连接词（如“but”）并调整顺序；4) “which gains my confidence”用词不当，应为“restored my confidence”或“gave me confidence”。建议按以上改写。

× Well to be honest, I really want my school to have a new cafeteria because the current 1 is a bit old and have hygiene problems.

✓ Well, to be honest, I really want my school to have a new cafeteria because the current one is a bit old and has hygiene problems.

错误在于代词和动词的单复数形式：1) “1”应为单词“one”；2) “have hygiene problems”主语“the current one”是单数，动词应为“has”。建议将“1”改为“one”，并将“have”改为“has”。

× I really want my school to fix this problem and provide students more healthier and affordable meals every day.

✓ I really want my school to fix this problem and provide students with healthier and more affordable meals every day.

此句中形容词和副词搭配错误：1) “more healthier”是重复比较错误，cannot use 'more' with comparative 'healthier'，应只用“healthier”；2) 词序及介词：动词“provide”通常后接宾语并加介词“with”用于受益对象，正确为“provide students with ...”；3) “more affordable”放在“healthier”之后并用连词“and”连接。建议改为“provide students with healthier and more affordable meals”。

× Well, since this is my last year of high school, I want to see this chance and participate in more events or obtain more certificates to make myself more competitive so that I can have a great chance of applying an ideal university in the future.

✓ Well, since this is my last year of high school, I want to seize this chance and participate in more events or obtain more certificates to make myself more competitive so that I can have a great chance of applying to an ideal university in the future.

原句问题：1) 动词搭配错误，“see this chance”不自然，应使用固定短语“seize this chance”（抓住机会）；2) “applying an ideal university” 缺少介词，正确搭配为“apply to a university”或“applying to a university”；3) “an ideal university”前应有不定冠词“an”。建议将“see”改为“seize”，并在“applying”前加介词“to”。