学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cevap daha doğal ve net olmalı; gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeler azaltılmalı. İlk cümlede doğrudan konuyu belirt (ör. "I'm a student"), sonra kısa bir destekleyici cümle ekle (yaşın ve sınıf seviyen). Toplam cümle sayısını 2-3'te tut ve akıcı bağlaç kullanma ihtiyacı yoksa kullanma.

範例: I'm a student. I'm 17 years old and this is my final year of high school.

建議: Cümle yapısı ve kelime seçimi düzeltilmeli; ifadeler anlamlı ve açık olmalı. Mekânı belirtirken basit ve doğru cümle kur: hangi şehir/okul veya köyde olduğunu söyle. Gereksiz fiil kullanımlarından kaçın ("going to do" yanlış).

範例: I study in my village in Mexico. I attend the local high school there.

建議: Duyguları ifade ederken daha nazik ve yapılandırılmış ol: kısa bir ana cümleyle görüşünü belirt, ardından 1-2 spesifik neden ver. Olumsuz duyguları aşırı güçlü kelimelerle ("hate") kullanmaktan kaçın, daha ölçülü ifadeler tercih et. Dilbilgisi (ör. "I don't love") ve kelime sırası düzeltilmeli.

範例: No, it's not a good place to study. The village is very small and the quality of education is poor, so I don't feel satisfied with my school.

建議: Cevabı net bir öneriyle ver ve nedenini açıkla. Belirsiz ve karışık ifadeler yerine açık plan veya istek söyle (ör. değişiklik yapmak veya taşınmak). Bağlaçlar kullanarak mantıksal bağ kur: "because" ile gerekçe ver.

範例: Yes, I would like some changes. Ideally, I would like to transfer to a better school outside the village because the current school lacks resources.

建議: Hedeflerini net ve akıcı ifade et; tekrarları azalt. Meslek ve ilgili nedenleri kısa ve doğrudan belirt. Dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimine dikkat ("study chemical engineering" veya "become a chemical engineer"). Maksimum 2-3 cümle kullan.

範例: I plan to study at a university in Istanbul and major in chemical engineering. I love chemistry and hope to become a chemical engineer in the future.

× I'm student right now, I'm 17 years old.

✓ I'm a student right now; I'm 17 years old.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable nouns. 'Student' is a singular countable noun and requires 'a' here. Suggestion: Use 'a student' or 'the student' depending on context.

× Uh, this year's my last last years in my high school life.

✓ This year is my last year of high school.

Redundant words and incorrect plural/singular form. Use present simple 'is' for a current fact and singular 'year' because it's one final year. Also use 'of high school' for the relationship. Suggestion: Say 'This year is my last year of high school.'

× I'm going to do Mexico in my village.

✓ I studied in my village school in Mexico.

Original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect verb and preposition. If student means past schooling, use past tense 'studied' and preposition 'in' for location; 'in my village' and 'in Mexico' need correct order. If they meant 'I go to school in my village in Mexico', use present simple. Suggestion: Clarify tense and use 'in' for locations: 'I go to school in my village in Mexico.' or 'I studied in my village school in Mexico.'

× The village is so small, education is so bad.

✓ The village is very small and the education is very poor.

Use 'the' when referring to a specific village previously mentioned. 'So bad' is colloquial; 'very poor' or 'not good' is more appropriate. Also connect clauses with 'and'. Suggestion: Use 'the village' and 'the education' and 'very' or 'poor' for clarity.

× I'm not love this village and my school.

✓ I don't love this village or my school.

'Love' is a stative verb and requires auxiliary 'do' in negative present simple: 'I don't love'. Also use 'or' to connect dislike for both items. Suggestion: Use 'I don't like' or 'I don't love' depending on strength: 'I don't like this village or my school.'

× Then my I leave.

✓ Then I will leave.

Original has incorrect word order and missing auxiliary for future meaning. Use 'I will leave' to express intention to leave in future. Suggestion: Use 'I will leave' or 'I plan to leave.'

× Yes, if I have chance this situation I'm OK.

✓ Yes, if I have the chance to change this situation, I'm okay.

Missing articles and incorrect word order. Use 'the chance' and 'to change this situation' for clarity. 'I'm OK' should follow the conditional clause. Suggestion: 'If I have the chance to change this situation, I'm okay with that.'

× I would like to change my school and rarely in this village.

✓ I would like to change my school and rarely stay in this village.

'Rarely' is misplaced; likely intended meaning is 'rarely stay' or 'rarely live' here. Original missing verb after 'rarely'. Suggestion: Use 'rarely stay in this village' or better: 'I would like to leave this village and not live here anymore.'

× I would like to go to the college College in Istanbul.

✓ I would like to go to college in Istanbul.

'College' is uncountable in this context and does not need the definite article 'the' or duplicate word. Use 'go to college' to express attending higher education. Suggestion: Say 'go to college in Istanbul.'

× I would like to do umm chemical engineering.

✓ I would like to study chemical engineering.

Use 'study' to talk about studying a subject. 'Do' is informal and less natural here. Suggestion: Use 'study chemical engineering'.

× I love chemistry and my features is a chemical engineers I love.

✓ I love chemistry and I want to be a chemical engineer.

Original mixes nouns and verbs incorrectly and has pronoun/number errors. 'My features is a chemical engineers' is ungrammatical. Use 'I want to be a chemical engineer' to express career aspiration. Suggestion: Say 'I love chemistry and I want to be a chemical engineer.'