学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Жауабыңызды нақты және ағылшын тілінің грамматикасына сай ету үшін сөйлем құрылымын және уақыт формаларын дұрыстаңыз. Қысқа, анық тақырыптық сөйлемнен бастаңыз (мысалы, "I am a fourth-year university student"), кейін жоспар туралы нақты қосымша мәлімет қосыңыз. Артық «uh» және қайталаулардан сақтаныңыз. Сонымен қатар, «master's degree» сияқты дұрыс тіркестер мен артикльдерді қолданыңыз.

範例: I am a fourth-year student at university. I am about to finish my undergraduate studies, and next year I plan to start a master's degree in my field.

建議: Жауабыңызды қозғалыс пен себептер арқылы нақтылаңыз; қысқа сөйлемнен кейін қосымша мәліметті байланыстыратын сөздерді (because, so, therefore) пайдаланыңыз. «that's it» сияқты бейресми тіркестерден аулақ болыңыз және орын атауларында анық болыңыз.

範例: I study at a university in Almaty, which is the largest city in Kazakhstan. Because my hometown is far away, I live in student accommodation during term time.

建議: Жауапты анығырақ және қысқа етіп айтыңыз. Университеттің мықты жақтарын нақты мысалдармен көрсетіңіз (бағдарламалар, зерттеу мүмкіндіктері, бедел). Қайталанатын сөздерден және шатасқан фразалардан сақтаныңыз.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study. It is one of the top universities in Kazakhstan, known for strong research programs and experienced faculty.

建議: Негізгі мәселені анық және грамматикалық дұрыстап айтыңыз: қандай өзгеріс керек және неге. Қысқа себептер мен нақты ұсыныстар беріңіз (мысалы, PhD дәрежелі оқытушыларды көп алу, зертханалар жаңарту). Тілдік қателерді түзетіңіз: "profess professors" орнына "professors", "master degree" орнына "master's degree".

範例: Yes, I would like improvements in the biology and chemistry departments. They mainly have teachers with only master's degrees, so I think hiring more professors with PhDs and upgrading the laboratory equipment would improve teaching quality.

建議: Жоспарларыңызды логикалық тәртіпте және нақты мақсаттармен айтыңыз. Бірнеше ықтимал жолды қысқа, анық сөйлемдермен бөліңіз. Грамматиканы дұрыстаңыз: "study a master's degree", "become a researcher" және «scientist» бірқалыпты түрінде қолданыңыз.

範例: I plan to study for a master's degree and then become a researcher. Alternatively, if I go into teaching, I might open my own school or work as a scientist in a research institute.

× I am the fourth years of student at university and I am up to finish my study in university and might be initiate.

✓ I am a fourth-year student at university and I am about to finish my studies and might graduate.

You used plural 'years' with singular 'student' and incorrect phrase 'up to finish'. Use 'a fourth-year student' for age/level and 'about to finish' for imminent action; 'studies' is the correct plural for academic work. Use 'graduate' instead of 'initiate' which is incorrect here.

× I will uh start studying master degree after this education.

✓ I will start studying for a master's degree after this education.

Use 'studying for a master's degree' with the possessive form and include 'for' before the degree. 'Master's degree' requires an apostrophe s; 'studying' as gerund is fine but needs correct preposition and article.

× I study at the university in Almaty. It's the city of Kazakhstan.

✓ I study at a university in Almaty. It's a city in Kazakhstan.

Do not use 'the university' unless a specific, previously mentioned university is implied. 'A city in Kazakhstan' is the correct general expression; replace 'the city of Kazakhstan' with 'a city in Kazakhstan'.

× It is far away from my house, my original hometown. So I go there to study and that's it.

✓ It is far from my home, my original hometown, so I go there to study.

Use 'home' instead of 'house' for hometown context. Remove 'and that's it' for concise formal answer. Combine clauses with a comma and lowercase 'so'.

× My university is considered as a one of the top universities in Kazakhstan.

✓ My university is considered one of the top universities in Kazakhstan.

Do not use 'a' before 'one of the'; use 'considered one of the top...' Also remove 'as' which is unnecessary.

× It's actually not not quite Kazakhstan university. It is a how to say part of like.

✓ It's not a typical Kazakh university; it is, how can I say, part of an international program.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and repetitive ('not not quite'). Use 'not a typical Kazakh university' and clarify meaning; 'how to say' can be replaced with 'how can I say' and finish the thought.

× Yes I do, especially my biology and chemistry faculty is weak of profess professors.

✓ Yes, I do. Especially, my biology and chemistry faculty is weak in qualified professors.

'Weak of profess professors' is incorrect. Use 'weak in' with 'qualified professors' or 'lacks qualified professors'. Place commas for clarity.

× I've only master degree UH students as a teacher as a UH so I would like to change it and make it more quali.

✓ I only have teachers with master's degrees, so I would like to improve that and make the faculty more qualified.

Original pronoun and noun order is incorrect. Use 'I only have teachers with master's degrees' and 'make the faculty more qualified'. Expand 'quali' to 'qualified' and remove unclear 'UH'.

× My future study plans is to study Master's degree and then become researcher and maybe if I continue my future study as a teacher, I would like to open my school or just become scientists.

✓ My future study plans are to study for a master's degree and then become a researcher, and maybe if I continue studying as a teacher, I would like to open my own school or become a scientist.

Use plural verb 'are' to match plural subject 'plans'. Use 'study for a master's degree', article 'a' before 'researcher', 'become a scientist' (singular), and 'open my own school'. Use consistent verb forms 'continue studying'.