学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答要自然并注意语法时态与词序。第一句应使用现在时态表达身份（e.g. "I'm a third-year student at ..."），并把学校名字与位置分开，不要重复信息。尽量简洁一到两句回答，避免冗长。

範例: I'm a third-year student at Jimi University. I major in International Accounting and my university is in the north of China.

建議: 注意句子结构和地名信息的一致性，避免自相矛盾（Xiamen is in southeast, not northern China）。使用关系从句时要加上适当的动词（which is located）。描述尽量具体并用一到两句完成。

範例: I study at Jamai University, which is located in Xiamen, Fujian Province, in southeastern China. Xiamen is a coastal city famous for its pleasant scenery and seaside views.

建議: 注意动词形式和搭配（"give"应为"gives"；"contains"可以换成更自然的动词如"has"）。避免重复词（"kept kept"）。可以用连接词使句子更流畅并给出具体细节，例如图书馆的资源或安静的学习环境。

範例: Yes. My university has a beautiful lake that gives a peaceful atmosphere for studying, and there are two large libraries that hold extensive collections of books and study spaces.

建議: 回答要更自然并纠正词序与词汇（如不要使用"will"，"air conditioning air conditioner"重复）。用一到两句先给总体态度，再说明具体建议并解释原因，使用连接词如"however"或"but"。

範例: Not really. I think the university is fine overall. However, in summer it would be helpful if the air conditioning was switched on about an hour before classes start so classrooms are cool and comfortable.

建議: 句子较清晰但注意固定搭配与冠词（"a master's degree in Finance"），以及流利度（减少口头填充词如"uh"）。可以补充简短原因或目标，使回答更具体。

範例: After graduation, I plan to apply for a master's degree in Finance. My dream university is the University of Melbourne in Australia because it has a strong finance program and international exposure.

× I'm a third year student studied in Jimi University.

✓ I'm a third-year student studying at Jimi University.

原句中“studied in Jimi University”与前半句时态和结构不一致，应使用现在分词“studying”表示正在就读；“third year”作形容词时应连字符“third-year”；介词用法应为“at Jimi University”。建议将被动/过去式改为现在进行式短语，表达“我正在吉米大学读三年级”。

× It's located in the northern part of China and I major in international accounting.

✓ It's located in the northern part of China, and I major in International Accounting.

“international accounting”作为专业名称时首字母大写更自然（尤其在正式说明中）；句子需要逗号连接两个并列分句以改善结构。建议规范专业名称并用标点连接句子。

× I study in Jamai University which located in Xiamen, Fujian province is in the northern part of China.

✓ I study at Jamai University, which is located in Xiamen, Fujian Province in the southeastern part of China.

原句存在多处结构问题：介词应为“at”；定语从句缺少系动词“is”；“Fujian province is in the northern part of China”与实际地理信息矛盾（厦门位于福建，福建在中国东南部），需更正为“southeastern part”。此外省名首字母大写。建议在定语从句中使用“which is located”并核对地理方位。

× It's a beautiful city well known as its beautiful view.

✓ It's a beautiful city well known for its scenery.

原句“well known as its beautiful view”用法不当，应使用短语“well known for”表示“以……闻名”；“beautiful view”重复“beautiful”且用“view”不如“scenery”自然。建议改为“well known for its scenery”。

× Yes, my university contains a very beautiful lake that's always give us a peaceful atmosphere to study and also we have two big libraries that kept kept a lot of books.

✓ Yes, my university has a very beautiful lake that always gives us a peaceful atmosphere for studying, and we also have two big libraries that keep a lot of books.

错误包括：1) “contains”用于机构并不自然，改为“has”；2) 定语从句主谓不一致，“that always give”应为“that always gives”（lake 为单数）；3) “to study”改为动名词短语“for studying”更自然；4) “kept kept”是重复和时态错误，应为现在时“keep”。建议使用主谓一致的现在时，并去掉重复词。

× Not really will.

✓ Not really.

“Not really will”结构不正确；回答否定时直接说“Not really”或“I don't think so.” 更自然。建议去掉“will”。

× But from my personal perspective, I think every summer maybe we can turn the air conditioning air conditioner early before the class begin, about an hour.

✓ But from my personal perspective, I think every summer we could turn the air conditioner on about an hour before classes begin.

问题包括：1) “air conditioning air conditioner”重复，应为“air conditioner”；2) “maybe we can”冗余且语气不自然，改为“we could”或“we can”；3) “before the class begin”主谓不一致，应为“before classes begin”（classes 复数，begin 对应复数）；4) 词序和介词使用需调整。建议简化表达并注意主谓一致。

× After graduation, uh I plan to apply for a master degree in finance and my dream university is in Australia, the University of Melbourne.

✓ After graduation, I plan to apply for a master's degree in Finance, and my dream university is the University of Melbourne in Australia.

错误包括：1) “master degree”应为所有格形式“master's degree”；2) 专业名“Finance”首字母大写更正式；3) 表达学校位置更自然的顺序是“the University of Melbourne in Australia”。建议使用“master's degree”并调整语序。