学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答缺乏清晰性和句子结构不准确。需直接且简洁地回答身份（工作/学生），并用一到两句补充当前状况和未来计划。注意时态、词汇和语法，例如“completed my postgraduate degree in Radiology”、“taking a break to recharge”，以及“plan to pursue a PhD”。尽量用不超过五句、自然连贯的表达。

範例: I recently completed my postgraduate degree in Radiology at Anhui University, and at the moment I am taking a break to recharge. In the future, I plan to pursue a PhD in radiology as my next step.

建議: 答案不清晰且有多处语法和词汇错误（例如“start at on him” “medical dialogue”）。需要直接给出学校名称和专业，使用正确的时态和词汇。保持一句主题句，最多补充一两句具体信息以保持简洁。

範例: I studied at Anhui Medical University last year, and my major was Medical Radiology. I focused on imaging techniques and diagnostic methods during my studies.

建議: 虽然表达了积极评价，但存在用词和句子结构错误（“pretty place”可换为“pleasant”或“great environment”，“strong landing atmosphere”不合适）。回答应先给出直接评价，然后用一两条具体理由支持，使用恰当词汇（e.g. supportive atmosphere, helpful teachers）并用连接词使句子连贯。

範例: Yes, it's a great place to study. The campus has a supportive atmosphere and the teachers are very helpful; they always give guidance when students face difficulties.

建議: 回答表达意图明确但语法和措辞问题影响理解（重复“mental and mental health”）。应先简短肯定，然后具体说明希望改进的方面并给出理由或例子，例如加强心理咨询服务、减轻学业压力。使用恰当连接词以确保逻辑清晰。

範例: Yes, I would like some changes. I hope the university would put more emphasis on students' mental health, for example by offering more counseling services and stress-management workshops.

建議: 回答内容明确但有冗余与语法问题（“long time goal”“about as my next major step”）。应直接陈述当前计划和未来目标，简洁衔接并使用正确短语（e.g. “long-term goal” “pursue a PhD in radiology”）。避免重复信息。

範例: At the moment I'm taking a break to recharge, but my long-term goal is to pursue a PhD in radiology. I plan to apply to doctoral programs after gaining some research experience.

× I completed my poster grade to 8° in medical Radiology at Anhui University last year and I am taking a break to recharge myself right now.

✓ I completed my postgraduate degree (or 'postgraduate program') in Medical Radiology at Anhui University last year, and I am taking a break to recharge myself now.

这个句子中“poster grade to 8°”是错误的表达，应该为“postgraduate degree/ program”或“master's degree”等；同时时态要保持一致：第一部分使用过去时（completed last year），第二部分用现在进行时或现在时（am taking a break / now）。建议用清晰的学位词汇并注意时态一致性：已在去年完成（过去时），目前正在休息（现在进行时）。

× My long term goal is to undertake the PhD program in radiology about as my next major step.

✓ My long-term goal is to undertake a PhD program in Radiology as my next major step.

句中“about as”是多余或错误搭配，应去掉，正确表达为“as my next major step”。另外“long term”应连字符“long-term”作为复合形容词。此句为描述将来的计划，使用一般现在时表状态是合适的。

× I start at on him Medical University last year and my major is medical dialogue.

✓ I started at Anhui Medical University last year, and my major was Medical Radiology (or 'medical imaging').

原句时态错误且有拼写/用词错误。“I start ... last year”应为过去时“I started ... last year”。“on him”应为地名或机构名，推测为“Anhui Medical University”。“medical dialogue”不合适，应为“Medical Radiology”或“medical imaging”。注意动词时态与名词拼写。

× Yes, of course, it's a pretty place to study at university.

✓ Yes, of course, it's a pleasant/nice place to study.

“pretty”通常用于形容人或小物件，形容学习环境更自然的词是“pleasant”或“nice”。另外“to study at university”有些多余，可简化为“to study”。建议选择更合适的形容词。

× We have strong landing atmosphere and very kind and friendly teachers who often told me to instance and precedence when we made some difficulties.

✓ We have a strong learning atmosphere and very kind, friendly teachers who often help me and give guidance when we encounter difficulties.

原句中“landing atmosphere”应为“learning atmosphere”；“strong”前需加冠词“a strong learning atmosphere”。“told me to instance and precedence”完全不合适，推测想表达“help me”或“give me guidance”以及“when we face/encounter difficulties”。建议使用常见搭配“help/ support/ give guidance”。

× Yes, I really like to make any changes at my study places. I hope it can be more focused on students mental and mental health.

✓ Yes, I would like to make some changes to my study place(s). I hope it can focus more on students' mental health.

“I really like to make any changes”用法不自然，通常说“I would like to make some changes”。“study places”单复数需根据语境选择，“study place”或“study environment”。“students mental and mental health”重复且缺少所有格，应为“students' mental health”。注意所有格和名词短语的正确搭配。

× I'm taking a break to recharge myself right now. My long time goal is to undertake a PhD program in radiology about as my next major step.

✓ I'm taking a break to recharge myself right now. My long-term goal is to undertake a PhD program in Radiology as my next major step.

与前文重复的句子：第一句现在进行时是正确的；第二句中“long time”应为“long-term”，并且“about as”要去掉。保持词汇和固定搭配的正确形式。