学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 回答内容基本相关，但存在语法错误、冗长和不自然表达。需简化句子结构，使用明确的主题句并用一到两个补充细节；注意动词形式（e.g. “study design”, “learn to draw clothing sketches”），避免重复信息。练习用连接词（and, which）正确连接短句。

範例: I am a design student at Zhejiang University of Technology and Science. I take several practical courses every day, and I am learning to draw clothing sketches to improve my technical skills.

建議: 答案能传达地点信息，但有语法和词汇使用错误（e.g. “situated”, “ocean sports”, “a water ball”）。应先给出地点，再补充一两个具体细节，使用恰当词汇并注意介词和名词搭配。

範例: I study in Wenzhou, a city in southern Zhejiang. Because it’s close to the sea, students can enjoy beautiful coastal views and try water sports like beach volleyball or paddleboarding.

建議: 回答清晰并有例子，但有小语法和表达问题（e.g. “a good place”, “sit there to read”）。建议使用更自然的连接词和更具体的细节，避免声音重复（focus 和 concentrate）。

範例: Yes, it’s a great place to study because the campus is quiet and calm. For example, our large library provides a peaceful environment where I can read and concentrate on my assignments.

建議: 回答意图明确但表达混乱和有语法错误（e.g. “needs improving”, “watch short video”）。建议先直接回答，然后列出两项具体改进，说明理由并用连接词使逻辑清楚。

範例: Yes, I would like a few improvements. For example, the library restrooms need renovation for better hygiene, and there should be a comfortable lounge where students can relax and watch short videos to recharge between study sessions.

建議: 回答能表达目标但语法和词汇不准确（e.g. “sit this year exam”, “these masters”）。应直接陈述计划，说明具体行动或时间表，并用合理的理由支持。保持简洁不超过五句。

範例: I plan to take the entrance exam this year to apply for a master’s program in design. I hope the master’s degree will improve my career prospects and give me more opportunities in the fashion industry.

× I am a student at Zhejiang University of Technology and Science which I study design.

✓ I am a student at Zhejiang University of Technology and Science, where I study design.

句中使用了关系代词“which”来引导表示地点或情况的从句，但“which”通常指物或事，且不适合引导关于地点的非限定性从句。这里应使用“where”表示地点或情形。建议使用“where”或将句子拆分为两个句子以更清晰地表达。

× Every day I take design courses and to learn how to draw closing sketch which helps me to improve my practical skills.

✓ Every day I take design courses and learn how to draw clothing sketches, which helps me improve my practical skills.

原句中“and to learn”与并列谓语结构不一致，应使用并列的动词原形“learn”。另外“closing sketch”应为“clothing sketch（服装草图）”，以及非限定性定语从句“which helps me improve my practical skills”中不需要“不定式”或多余的“to”。建议使用并列动词形式并注意拼写和名词复数形式。

× I study in Wenzhou which situated in southern Zhejiang.

✓ I study in Wenzhou, which is situated in southern Zhejiang.

缺少系动词“is”，导致句子不完整。关系从句中需要完整的谓语“is situated”。同时“in southern Zhejiang”表示方位，句子结构需要逗号分隔主句与非限定性定语从句。建议在关系从句中补上系动词并使用逗号分隔。

× It is near the ocean so we can enjoy many beautiful sea views and take some ocean sports just like a water ball in the beach.

✓ It is near the ocean, so we can enjoy many beautiful sea views and do some water sports, such as water ball, on the beach.

短语“take some ocean sports”用法不当，应使用“do water sports”。“just like”可改为“such as”列举例子。同时介词“in the beach”应为“on the beach”。建议使用固定搭配“do water sports”并注意介词用法。

× Yes, it's really good place to study because it's very peaceful.

✓ Yes, it's a really good place to study because it's very peaceful.

缺少冠词“a”以限定单数可数名词“place”。“really”作程度副词放置正确，但名词前需要冠词。建议在单数可数名词前使用正确的冠词。

× For example, our school has a big library and students can sit there to reading books or study, which really helps me focus and concentrate myself.

✓ For example, our school has a big library and students can sit there to read books or study, which really helps me focus and concentrate.

不定式“to reading”不正确，正确形式应为动词原形“read”。此外“concentrate myself”是错误搭配，英语中通常用“concentrate”或“concentrate on something”，而不加反身代词。建议使用“read”并去掉“myself”或改为“concentrate on my studies”。

× Yes, I would like changes while I study.

✓ Yes, I would like some changes while I study.

名词“changes”为可数复数，但在此语境下需要限定词“some”来表示希望进行的一些改变。没有使用适当的限定词使句子不自然。建议加上“some”或其他限定词以明确数量。

× For example, the library's restrooms needs improving and there can be some comfortable area where students can relax and watch short video so students can help them to focus on.

✓ For example, the library's restrooms need improving, and there could be some comfortable areas where students can relax and watch short videos so students can get help focusing.

“restrooms”是复数，谓语动词应为“need”而非“needs”。“area”与“video”也应采用复数“areas/short videos”以匹配前文“some”。最后“so students can help them to focus on”结构混乱，应改为“so students can get help focusing”或“so students can focus better”。建议注意主谓一致和名词复数形式，并改写不清晰的短语。

× As you can see, I sit this year exam with the aim of applying for a master's degree and I will continue my academic study.

✓ As you can see, I am taking this year's exam with the aim of applying for a master's degree, and I will continue my academic studies.

“sit this year exam”为不自然表达，英语中通常说“take this year's exam”或“I am taking this year's exam”。“this year”与“exam”之间需所有格“this year's”。“study”在此语境下应使用复数“studies”。建议使用现在进行时表示当前正在进行的动作，并使用正确的名词形式。

× I hope these masters will help me to have a better job opportunities.

✓ I hope this master's degree will help me to have better job opportunities.

“these masters”用法不当，指代硕士学位应使用“this master's degree”或“a master's degree”。同时“a better job opportunities”存在冠词与复数冲突，应该是“better job opportunities”或“a better job opportunity”。建议改为“this master's degree will help me have better job opportunities”。