学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and filler words, correct institution name and field phrasing, and use one or two specific reasons why you like it. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: I'm a student at Splikanova College, where I study accounting. I like it because the campus is friendly and the tutors support students closely, so I feel comfortable and relaxed there.

建議: Give a clear, grammatically correct location and name, then add a brief specific detail. Use linking words (and, because, for example) to make sentences coherent and avoid hesitations.

範例: I study in Moscow at Plicanova College, which is well known locally. I study accounting there because I find it more interesting than math, for example, as it relates directly to real business problems.

建議: Answer directly with one clear sentence then support with 1–2 specific reasons. Fix grammar (program → programs; never let you to be relaxed → keeps you busy). Avoid absolute negatives that sound awkward.

範例: Yes, it's a good place to study because the college offers strong programs and experienced teachers. Also, the workload is demanding, which helps students stay focused and make steady progress.

建議: State one or two concrete changes and explain why they would help, using linking words (for example, because). Correct grammar (new constructions → new facilities; techniques → technology; will helps → will help).

範例: Yes, I would improve the college environment by adding new facilities and modern technology, for example better study rooms and computer labs, because those changes would make studying more comfortable and efficient.

建議: Give a clear, concise plan with timeline and specific actions. Use correct tense (after I finish college, I will go to university) and avoid vague phrases like "huge". Limit to 2–3 sentences.

範例: After I finish college, I plan to go to university to continue my studies in accounting. To prepare, I will take entrance courses and study advanced topics, which will require dedicating most of my free time to preparation.

× I'm a student, I'm studying at the college right now. They're called Splikanova.

✓ I'm a student; I'm studying at a college right now. It's called Splikanova.

The speaker used the plural pronoun 'they' to refer to a single college. Use 'it' for a singular institution. Also 'the college' was changed to 'a college' for naturalness and punctuation improved to join clauses correctly. Suggestion: Refer to single organizations with 'it' and use articles appropriately.

× Uh, I'm studying on counting and I would say that the college, it is the most likable place for me where I feel comfortable and relaxed.

✓ I'm studying accounting, and I would say that the college is the most likable place for me, where I feel comfortable and relaxed.

The phrase 'studying on counting' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'accounting' and no preposition is needed. Also remove the redundant subject 'it' after 'the college'. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use the correct noun form and avoid unnecessary pronoun repetition.

× I'm studying Moscow in college calls Plicanova it one of the most, uh, famous colleges in Moscow and I'm glad to study there.

✓ I'm studying in Moscow at a college called Plicanova; it's one of the most famous colleges in Moscow, and I'm glad to study there.

Word order and article usage were incorrect: use 'studying in Moscow' and 'a college called Plicanova'. The original had missing prepositions and punctuation, making the sentence run-on. Added 'it's' for clarity and corrected punctuation. Suggestion: Place prepositional phrases ('in Moscow', 'at a college called...') in correct order and use punctuation to separate ideas.

× I'm studying accounting there and I would say that it's much more interesting than math, for example.

✓ I'm studying accounting there, and I would say that it's much more interesting than math, for example.

Mostly correct grammatically; added a comma for clarity. The verb+ -ing 'studying accounting' is correctly used as a continuous action. Suggestion: Use commas to separate clauses for readability.

× Yeah, sure. Actually it's a good college. It's a good place to study because it has good program, it has good teachers and this college never let you to be relaxed, so you have to study every time.

✓ Yeah, sure. Actually it's a good college. It's a good place to study because it has a good program and good teachers, and this college never lets you be relaxed, so you have to study all the time.

Missing article: 'good program' should be 'a good program'. Verb form error: 'never let you to be relaxed' should be 'never lets you be relaxed'—'let' in this sense takes base verb without 'to' and must agree with singular subject 'this college', so 'lets'. 'Every time' is unnatural here; 'all the time' is the correct idiom. Suggestion: Use articles before singular countable nouns, ensure subject-verb agreement, and omit 'to' after 'let'.

× I would like the place where I'm studying to make some changes because I don't really like the environment in our college.

✓ I would like the place where I'm studying to make some changes because I don't really like the environment at our college.

Preposition use: 'in our college' is understandable but 'at our college' is the more natural collocation in English when talking about the institution's environment. Suggestion: Use common collocations such as 'at school/college/university' when referring to the institution.

× So I would add some new constructions, new techniques. I think it will helps our college to be more comfortable.

✓ So I would add some new facilities and new techniques. I think it will help our college to become more comfortable.

'Constructions' is awkward; 'facilities' fits better. Verb form: 'it will helps' is incorrect—modal auxiliary 'will' must be followed by base verb 'help'. Also 'to be more comfortable' is improved to 'to become more comfortable' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms after auxiliaries and choose natural nouns for facilities.

× My future plans are huge. As soon as I will finish my college and I'm going to go to the university, I have to study a lot, have to prepare myself to study in universities, so it will take much of my free time to prepare for that.

✓ My future plans are big. As soon as I finish college, I will go to university. I will have to study a lot and prepare myself for university, so it will take much of my free time to prepare for that.

Future after 'as soon as' should use present tense, not 'will' ('as soon as I finish'). 'Finish my college' is more naturally 'finish college'. Use consistent future forms: 'I will go' and 'I will have to'. 'Prepare myself to study in universities' is awkward; 'prepare myself for university' is clearer. Also 'huge' is better replaced by 'big' or 'ambitious' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use present simple after time conjunctions like 'as soon as', ensure consistent future tense usage, and prefer natural collocations.