学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundant phrases. For example, say "I'm a high school student" rather than adding "especially" which is unnecessary. Keep it to one short sentence.

範例: I'm a high school student. I study at a local public school and I'm currently in my final year preparing for university entrance exams.

建議: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details using linking words. Remove repetition and correct grammar (use 'better' not 'then'). For instance, say where you mainly study, then give reasons and an example.

範例: I usually study in my own room at home because it's quiet and comfortable. However, I sometimes study in the library because I can concentrate better there and it helps me focus when I have important exams.

建議: Be clearer and avoid repetition. Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No) and give specific reasons using linking words. Correct verbs and phrases (e.g., 'the best place', 'I am encouraged by them'). Limit to two or three supporting sentences.

範例: Yes, the library is the best place for me to study because many other students are focused there. As a result, I feel encouraged and less likely to get distracted, so I can concentrate on my work.

建議: Clarify your meaning and use standard vocabulary. Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No) and explain one specific change you'd like, using linking words. Avoid colloquial contractions like 'wanna' in formal tests and vague terms like 'macro node.'

範例: I wouldn't change my regular study place much, but sometimes I would like a quieter environment with fewer distractions. For example, I might study in a private study room or a quiet café when I need to concentrate on an important project.

建議: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons. Use correct phrases: 'study psychology at university/college' and 'become a police officer.' Explain briefly why psychology helps that career.

範例: I plan to study psychology at college because I want to become a police officer. I believe studying psychology will help me understand people's behaviour and improve my communication and investigation skills.

× I am a student, especially I am a high school student.

✓ I am a student; specifically, I am a high school student.

The issue is using 'especially' incorrectly to add emphasis. Use 'specifically' or 'particularly' to clarify. Also punctuation should separate clauses for clarity. (ID 13)

× I usually study at home in my own room, but sometimes I go to the library and study and because I can concentrate then other places, for example classroom or my home.

✓ I usually study at home in my own room, but sometimes I go to the library because I can concentrate there better than in other places, for example in a classroom or at home.

The sentence is disorganized and contains misplaced phrases. 'Because I can concentrate then other places' is incorrect. Use 'there' to refer to the library and compare with 'other places'; include prepositions 'in' or 'at' for locations. Reorder clauses for clarity. (ID 26)

× You definitely, as I said, library is a best place to best place to study.

✓ Definitely, as I said, the library is the best place to study.

Errors: article use and adjective form. Use the definite article 'the' before 'library' and 'best' needs 'the' as superlative. Remove duplicated phrase. Place adverb 'definitely' appropriately. (ID 13)

× And because there are other students like me, so they study very hard and I always share.

✓ Because there are other students like me, they study very hard and I always feel encouraged.

Original used 'share' incorrectly; pronoun/linking word 'so' is redundant with 'because'. 'Feel encouraged' expresses the intended meaning. Also remove unnecessary conjunctions. (ID 12)

× I was, I was. I'm always cheer up by them.

✓ I was... I'm always cheered up by them.

'Cheer up' needs to be in passive past participle 'cheered up' after 'am/is/are' or 'was'. 'I'm always cheered up' uses correct passive construction meaning they boost my mood. Remove repeated 'I was' or clarify context. (ID 15)

× Actually, I don't think I wanna take my study place, but sometimes I want no reflection by changing the place.

✓ Actually, I don't think I want to change my study place, but sometimes I want a change of scenery.

Informal 'wanna' should be 'want to'. 'Take my study place' and 'no reflection by changing the place' are incorrect idioms. Use 'change my study place' or 'a change of scenery' to express desire to study somewhere different. (ID 4)

× For example, I'd like to change to. I want I would like to study in the macro node.

✓ For example, I'd like to study in a different place; I would like to study in the macronode.

Sentence fragments and repetition cause confusion. Complete the fragment 'change to' with the target place. 'Macro node' is unclear; if it is a specific place name, use 'the'; otherwise use 'a'. Ensure sentences are complete. (ID 26)

× I'm going to study psychology in the college because I want to be like I would like to be our police officer in the future and I thought it is important to study psychology to become our police officer.

✓ I'm going to study psychology at college because I would like to become a police officer in the future, and I think it is important to study psychology to become one.

Use 'at college' instead of 'in the college'. Avoid redundant phrases 'want to be like I would like to be'. Use consistent future intention 'would like to become'. Use present tense 'think' for current belief. Replace 'our police officer' with 'a police officer' or 'one' for generality. (ID 7)