学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn và rõ ràng, nhưng bạn có thể mở rộng một chút để thể hiện độ tự nhiên và cung cấp thêm thông tin liên quan (ví dụ: năm học, chuyên ngành hoặc điều bạn thích ở trường). Tránh câu quá ngắn; dùng một câu chủ đề rồi một câu bổ sung là tốt.

範例: I'm currently a high school student in my final year. I study a science-focused curriculum because I'm interested in engineering, which keeps me quite busy with projects and exams.

建議: Bạn trả lời có thông tin nhưng câu hơi dài và lặp từ ("really"). Cần cấu trúc rõ: câu chủ đề nêu tên trường, sau đó dùng liên từ để thêm chi tiết cụ thể và ngắn gọn (ví dụ: khoảng cách, lịch sử). Tránh ngắt quãng không cần thiết và dùng từ chính xác hơn.

範例: I study at Louis Dome High School, which is about a 30-minute bus ride from my home. It has a long history and is well known locally for its role during the war, which makes it quite prestigious.

建議: Câu trả lời truyền đạt ý nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ sai ("put a lot of air"), lặp từ "like" và câu quá dài, thiếu liên từ phù hợp. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu khẳng định ngắn, rồi bổ sung 1–2 lý do cụ thể với từ vựng chính xác và nối từ (because, and, also).

範例: Yes, definitely. It is competitive to get in because applicants need high scores, and the school offers excellent facilities, up-to-date learning materials and experienced teachers, which all help students succeed.

建議: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp (số nhiều/ít: "school have"), dùng từ không chính xác và thừa ("like", "you know"). Cần trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về trang thiết bị hoặc hỗ trợ cho học sinh năng khiếu, dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và kết thúc gọn.

範例: Not really, because my school already has comprehensive facilities. For example, there are modern sports halls and coaching programs for talented athletes, as well as art studios and music rooms that help students develop their skills.

建議: Bạn nêu mục tiêu nhưng có từ sai ("aisles certificates"), lặp từ và cấu trúc hơi lủng củng. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu mục tiêu cụ thể (ví dụ: điểm IELTS), rồi giải thích vì sao và làm sao đạt được mục tiêu (kế hoạch học tập). Dùng từ chính xác và tránh lặp từ liên tiếp.

範例: My immediate goal is to achieve an overall band of 8.0 in the IELTS exam. I believe this will strengthen my university applications, so I plan to take regular practice tests and attend a preparation course to improve my speaking and writing skills.

× I'm currently a high school student.

✓ I'm currently a high school student.

No grammatical error; the present continuous 'I'm currently' with 'a high school student' is acceptable. Keep as is.

× I'm studying at Louis Dome High School, which is not a really close school to my house, but is a really great school with a long history that connected to our war in the past.

✓ I'm studying at Louis Dome High School, which is not very close to my house, but it is a great school with a long history connected to the war in the past.

Use 'close to' rather than 'close school to'; replace 'a really' with 'very' for naturalness; include the subject 'it' before 'is'; use 'connected to the war' (past participle) rather than 'that connected to our war' for correct modifier structure.

× Of course it is because I need to put a lot of air for it in order to get into that school and that school also need a lot of like high score for students to get into.

✓ Of course it is because I had to put in a lot of effort to get into that school, and that school also needs high scores for students to be admitted.

'Put a lot of air' is incorrect collocation; use 'put in a lot of effort'. Past vs present: if referring to past application use 'had to'; if general, 'have to'. 'That school also need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular subject (third person singular). Use 'high scores' and 'to be admitted' for natural phrasing.

× And that school also provide like a lot of like good materials, educational materials and goods teachers as well.

✓ The school also provides many useful educational materials and good teachers.

Subject-verb agreement: 'school provides' (third person singular). 'Like' is informal and overused; remove. 'A lot of like good materials' is ungrammatical; use 'many useful educational materials'. 'Goods teachers' is incorrect adjective-noun order; use 'good teachers'.

× I don't really think so because it seemed like my school is like perfect.

✓ I don't really think so because my school seems perfect.

'It seemed like' mixes past with present opinion; use present 'seems' to match 'I don't really think so'. Remove filler 'like' for clarity.

× My school have all the facilities, all the equipment for students, especially for students who are talented in sports.

✓ My school has all the facilities and equipment for students, especially for those talented in sports.

Use 'has' for third person singular. Combine 'facilities and equipment' with 'and' for concision. Replace repeated 'students' with 'those' to avoid repetition.

× They provide.

✓ They provide support and training for talented students.

Sentence fragment 'They provide.' lacks an object. Add what 'they provide' to complete the sentence and match context.

× I would say anything for students with talent for them to, you know, improve their own.

✓ I would say they provide anything for talented students to improve themselves.

The original is disfluent and ungrammatical. 'Improve their own' is incomplete; use 'improve themselves'. Reorder to a clear subject-verb-object structure.

× So my upcoming plan is to have the aisles certificates with at least the 8.0 overall, and I believe that that really benefits me in the future, specifically when I enter the exam to university.

✓ My plan is to get the IELTS certificate with at least an overall 8.0, and I believe that will benefit me in the future, especially when I take the university entrance exam.

Correct 'aisles' to 'IELTS'. Use 'get' or 'obtain' rather than 'have'. Use 'an overall 8.0' (article). Future benefit: 'will benefit me' is appropriate. 'Enter the exam to university' is incorrect collocation; use 'take the university entrance exam'.

× I really want to go to a good university, that's why.

✓ I really want to go to a good university; that's why.

Run-on with comma splice. Replace comma with semicolon or split into two sentences. The content is fine.