学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and articles, reduce hesitation, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words if giving multiple points (for example, "and" or "also"). Be concise (no more than 5 sentences).

範例: I currently work as Head of Operational Excellence in a logistics company, and I have been in this role for about four years. My main responsibilities include improving business processes and developing my team members to increase efficiency and performance.

建議: Use correct tense and article/determiner forms, and state institution names clearly. Avoid filler sounds. Keep the answer direct: state when you graduated and where you studied at each level, optionally adding a brief detail about your field or reason for choice.

範例: I completed my bachelor's degree at Mahidol University. Five years later I pursued a master's degree at Ghent University, focusing on a related field to deepen my expertise.

建議: Be specific and concise: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because" or "for example"). Correct word choice (e.g., "specialist professors") and grammar will improve clarity.

範例: Yes, it was a good place to study because the classes were well-structured and the professors were specialists in chemical engineering who provided strong academic guidance.

建議: Answer directly with a clear suggestion and a reason. Use linking words like "for example" correctly and avoid vague phrases. Be specific about the change and explain the benefit briefly.

範例: Yes. I would improve student transport options—for example, by arranging shuttle services or better public transport connections—because that would make it easier and safer for students to commute to campus.

建議: Make a clear plan statement and give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because" or "so that"). Correct grammar ("I plan to" not "I have planned to"; "it meets my interests") and concise phrasing will help. Mention where or what level if possible.

範例: I plan to study supply chain management abroad because it matches my interests and will support my career growth. This course will broaden my skills beyond logistics operations and help me take on more strategic roles.

× I am currently work as a head of operation excellence in logistic business.

✓ I am currently working as the head of operational excellence in the logistics business.

The continuous present requires the present participle (working) not the base verb (work). Use the definite article 'the' for a specific job title, 'operational' (adjective) modifies 'excellence', and 'logistics' is the correct noun form. Improve by using subject + 'am' + verb-ing and correct noun/adjective forms.

× I work here around 4 years.

✓ I have worked here for around four years.

When expressing a duration that started in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect tense ('have worked') and the preposition 'for' before the time period. Use 'four' written out in formal speech.

× Uh, my responsibility are including improving process in the business and also, uh, developing people in the.

✓ Uh, my responsibilities include improving processes in the business and also developing people.

Plural subject 'responsibilities' requires plural verb 'include' rather than 'are including'. Use plural 'processes' for general tasks. Remove the trailing incomplete preposition 'in the' to make a complete sentence.

× I graduated from UH Mahidol University in Bachelor degree and after five year I continue my studying in Master degree from Gershesi University.

✓ I graduated from UH Mahidol University with a Bachelor's degree, and after five years I continued my studies in a Master's degree program at Gershesi University.

Use simple past 'graduated' and simple past 'continued' for completed actions. Use 'with a Bachelor's degree' and 'Master's degree' with possessive form; 'years' should be plural. 'Studies' is more natural than 'studying' here and 'at' or 'in' a university/program is standard.

× OK. I would talk about a Manhattan university that I that is the first university that I attend.

✓ OK. I will talk about Manhattan University, which was the first university I attended.

Use 'will' or simple past for talking about a past fact; 'which was' introduces a relative clause correctly. Use past tense 'attended' for the completed action. Remove redundant words and capitalize proper noun.

× The class is quite good is because they have specialist professor to help you study in the chemical engineering.

✓ The classes are quite good because they have specialist professors to help you study chemical engineering.

Use plural 'classes' and 'professors' for general statements. Remove redundant 'is' and use 'because' to introduce the reason. 'Study chemical engineering' is the normal collocation without 'in the'.

× Of course I would like to. MMM I would like to recommend their sharing something for us that for their student for example public transport because it help student to go there.

✓ Of course I would. I would like to suggest they provide something for their students, for example public transport, because it would help students get there.

Use 'would' appropriately; 'suggest they provide' is clearer than 'recommend their sharing'. Use plural 'students' and add 'would' for conditional polite tone. Use 'help students get there' as natural phrasing and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I have planned to continue studying abroad in the supply chain management and realistic is because it's met with my interest and support the career growth in the future.

✓ I plan to continue studying abroad in supply chain management because it matches my interests and will support my career growth in the future.

Use present simple 'plan' for future intentions or 'have planned' with correct structure; 'matches' (present tense) agrees with 'it', 'will support' for future result. Remove 'the' before 'supply chain management' when speaking generally. 'Realistic is' is incorrect; replace with coherent clause.

× Right now I look after only logistic but I need to broaden.

✓ Right now I look after only logistics, but I need to broaden my experience.

Use plural 'logistics' for the field, and 'broaden my experience' completes the idea. Add a comma before 'but' and provide an object for 'broaden' to make the sentence grammatical.