学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be concise and correct. Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid adding unclear abbreviations or redundant words. Correct grammar: use 'I am a high school student at UMM' (or name of school) and avoid filler sounds like 'um' or extra words.

範例: I am a high school student at UMM.

建議: Open with a clear, complete sentence and then give one specific reason. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas, but avoid hesitations. Use correct noun forms: 'economics' instead of 'economy'.

範例: I study at the high school affiliated with UMM. Currently I focus on science subjects because I plan to study engineering or economics at university.

建議: Answer directly and give specific supporting details. Remove fillers ('uh') and correct grammar: use 'are usually friendly' and 'they are always willing to help me if I'm late.'

範例: Yes, I think it's a good place to study because my classmates are usually friendly, and they are always willing to help me if I arrive late.

建議: Give a clear suggestion in one sentence, then explain with a specific reason. Use correct grammar: 'I would like my school to be quieter because it is near a busy street and noise interrupts our study periods.' Avoid repetitions and fillers.

範例: I would like my school to be quieter because it is close to a busy street, and the traffic noise often disturbs our study time.

建議: State your plan clearly and then describe what you are doing to prepare. Use correct terms: 'study economics at university' and 'I'm currently focusing on math and physics to prepare.' Avoid fillers and grammar errors.

範例: In the future, I want to study economics at university, so at the moment I am focusing on improving my math and physics skills to prepare for the program.

× I am a student UMM studying in a high school.

✓ I am a student. Umm, I study at a high school.

The original mixes noun and verb forms and uses no preposition. Use 'study at' to indicate place of education. Also separate ideas with a full stop and include hesitation 'Umm' correctly placed.

× Umm studying in a high school and I'm currently focusing on science subjects because I want to study engineering or economy later.

✓ Umm, I study at a high school, and I'm currently focusing on science subjects because I want to study engineering or economics later.

The original lacks a subject for the verb 'studying' and uses 'economy' incorrectly; 'economics' is the correct field name. Add subject 'I' and use a comma before 'and' for clarity.

× I think it is a good place to study because uh, my friends uh, usually friendly and they always willing to support me when I am late.

✓ I think it is a good place to study because, uh, my friends are usually friendly and they are always willing to support me when I am late.

Adjective 'friendly' needs the verb 'are' to form a clause; 'willing' also needs 'are' to form 'are willing'. Add 'are' for correct subject-verb agreement and clause completeness.

× I would like my school would be uh would be quieter because my school nears a street so it is very noisy in the rest hour so it can influence on my UH on my study.

✓ I would like my school to be quieter because it is near a street, so it is very noisy during break time and that can affect my studies.

Use the infinitive 'would like ... to be' rather than 'would like my school would be'. 'Near' is the correct preposition, 'during break time' is clearer than 'rest hour', and 'affect my studies' is correct collocation rather than 'influence on my study'.

× In the futures, I want to study and learn economy university. So nowadays uh umm try to study a good at the math and physics.

✓ In the future, I want to study economics at university. So nowadays I try to study math and physics well.

Use singular 'future' not 'futures'. 'Economics' is the correct field name and 'at university' is the correct phrase. 'Study a good at the math' is ungrammatical; replace with 'study math and physics well' to use the adverb 'well' to modify 'study'.