学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and add one short supporting detail. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing. For example, say where you study and your year. Use simple correct structures: 'I am a junior high student' rather than 'in my own'.

範例: I am a junior high school student. I study at SMR and I am in the second year, so most of my classes are with the same group of classmates.

建議: Answer directly with the name and a brief description of the school. Avoid unclear phrases like 'remember to learn from.' Use one or two coherent supporting details (location, type of school, or what you study).

範例: I study at SMR, a public junior high near my neighborhood. It has good science and language teachers, so I enjoy my lessons there.

建議: Respond directly to whether the place is good and give a clear reason. Use linking words like 'because' correctly. Keep it concise and relevant (e.g., facilities, teachers, atmosphere).

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the teachers are supportive and there are quiet study areas. Also, having friends there makes the environment friendly and motivating.

建議: Directly state if you want changes and give one specific, realistic suggestion with a reason. Avoid vague or grammatically incorrect phrases. Use linking words such as 'for example' or 'because.'

範例: I would like the school to improve the classroom facilities, for example by adding more computers, because that would help us with research and group projects.

建議: State your future plan clearly using future tense and add a brief explanation (where, why, or when). Avoid incorrect tense forms like 'I have studied abroad' when you mean a future intention.

範例: I plan to study abroad after high school, probably in Australia, because I want to improve my English and experience a different education system.

× I am a student in my own in my junior high school.

✓ I am a student at my junior high school.

The phrase 'in my own in my junior high school' is incorrect and redundant. Use the preposition 'at' to indicate the place where you study: 'at my junior high school.' Remove 'my own' and the extra 'in.' Suggestion: say 'I am a student at my junior high school.'

× I am studying at SMR and remember to learn from.

✓ I am studying at SMR and remember what I learn there.

The original sentence uses 'remember to learn from' incorrectly. To express recalling information learned at a place, use 'remember what I learn there.' Also add 'there' to refer to SMR. Ensure the verb 'remember' takes a noun clause ('what I learn') rather than the infinitive 'to learn.'

× I have to play it because I have many friends in the place.

✓ I want to go there because I have many friends at that school.

The sentence uses 'play it' and 'in the place' incorrectly. 'Play' is wrong contextually; likely intended 'go' or 'stay.' Use 'go there' and 'at that school' or 'there' to refer to the study place. Also change 'have to' (obligation) to 'want to' to match likely meaning. Choose 'at' for institutions and 'there' for location reference.

× In the class because I have many friends like a smart.

✓ In the class, because I have many smart friends.

The phrase 'like a smart' is ungrammatical. To describe friends who are intelligent, use the adjective 'smart' after the noun: 'smart friends.' Also include a comma after 'In the class' and reorder to form a complete sentence: 'I like the class because I have many smart friends.'

× I have studied abroad.

✓ I plan to study abroad.

The question asked about future study plans, so using the present perfect 'I have studied abroad' is inappropriate. To state a future intention, use 'I plan to study abroad' or 'I want to study abroad.' If the student meant past experience, 'I have studied abroad' would be correct, but it does not answer the future-focused question. Suggestion: use future-intent phrasing such as 'I plan to study abroad.'