学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng hơn; dùng một hoặc hai câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc, nêu rõ bạn đang học gì và cảm nhận chung. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi chia động từ (vd. "I am studying"). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi đưa thêm 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ.

範例: I am currently a high school student majoring in the arts. Although my studies keep me busy, I enjoy learning new skills and exploring different creative subjects.

建議: Cải thiện phát âm và rõ ràng thông tin địa điểm; dùng câu ngắn, rõ ràng và tránh ngập ngừng. Nêu đầy đủ tên trường và vị trí, thời gian học, và lý do bạn thích nơi đó nếu muốn mở rộng. Tránh câu bị dang dở.

範例: I study at Hen Twin High School in Ningbing City. I have been attending this school for five years, and I really enjoy the supportive atmosphere and my teachers.

建議: Sửa cấu trúc câu và từ vựng để trả lời trực tiếp; tránh nhầm lẫn giữa "students" và "teachers". Dùng câu chủ đề ngắn (Yes, it is...) rồi nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể, dùng tính từ phù hợp (supportive, friendly, helpful).

範例: Yes, it is a very good place to study. The teachers are friendly and supportive, and the school fosters a calm environment that helps students concentrate.

建議: Trình bày ý kiến rõ ràng hơn và cụ thể hóa đề xuất; dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, also). Nêu rõ những gì cần cải thiện (ví dụ: more computers, quiet study rooms, group study spaces) và lý do vì sao lợi ích. Giữ trong tối đa 3-4 câu.

範例: Yes. I think the school should upgrade its facilities, for example by expanding the library and adding more computers. It would also help to create dedicated group study rooms so students can collaborate without disturbing others.

建議: Làm rõ mục tiêu học tập dài hạn và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp/vốn từ (ví dụ ‘finish my degree’, ‘improve my skills’). Tránh thông tin mơ hồ như “my mother” nếu không đúng ý; nêu ngành muốn học, kỹ năng muốn phát triển và mục tiêu nghề nghiệp cụ thể. Giữ 2-3 câu rõ ràng.

範例: I plan to complete my degree in the arts and improve my skills in design and communication. After graduating, I hope to find a job in graphic design where I can use these skills professionally.

× I am a student at the moment I am study arts until in high school and I focus on my major.

✓ I am a student at the moment. I studied arts until high school and I am now focusing on my major.

The original mixes present continuous and incorrect verb forms. 'I am study' is incorrect; use 'I study' for habitual or 'I am studying' for ongoing. However the meaning indicates past study of arts until high school, so 'I studied arts until high school' is appropriate. Also use 'I am now focusing' to show current ongoing action. Suggestions: separate into two sentences and choose correct tense: past simple for completed past actions, present continuous for current ongoing actions. Vietnamese: Câu gốc trộn thì hiện tại và dạng động từ không đúng. 'I am study' sai, cần 'I studied' cho hành động đã hoàn thành trong quá khứ; 'I am now focusing' cho hành động đang diễn ra.

× Although my studies keep me quite busy, I really enjoy learning new things and developing my skills.

✓ Although my studies keep me quite busy, I really enjoy learning new things and developing my skills.

This sentence is already grammatically correct: 'keep me' + adjective and gerunds 'learning' and 'developing' are used properly. No change needed. Suggestions: none. Vietnamese: Câu này đúng ngữ pháp; gerund 'learning' và 'developing' được sử dụng chính xác.

× I study as hen hen twin high school, uh, I in located in Ning Bing city.

✓ I study at Hen Hen Twin High School, which is located in Ning Bing City.

Original has incorrect preposition 'as' and wrong word order 'I in located'. Use 'study at' for institutions. To give location use a relative clause: 'which is located in...'. Also capitalize proper nouns. Suggestions: use 'study at' + school name and 'is located in' for locations. Vietnamese: Câu gốc có cấu trúc sai: dùng 'as' sai, và 'I in located' sai trật tự từ; nên dùng 'study at' và 'which is located in'.

× I, I have been learning, I have been study there for five years and I really enjoy the.

✓ I have been studying there for five years and I really enjoy it.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been studying' for an action that started in the past and continues. 'Have been study' is incorrect; 'study' must be in present participle 'studying'. Also finish the sentence with 'it' to refer to the school. Suggestions: use 'have been' + verb-ing and include object pronoun 'it' to complete 'enjoy it'. Vietnamese: Cần dùng 'have been studying' thay vì 'have been study'; đồng thời thêm đại từ 'it' để hoàn thành ý 'enjoy it'.

× I study at Tanya High School is very good.

✓ Tanya High School is very good.

Redundant subject 'I study at' makes sentence ungrammatical. To state the school is good, use the school name as subject. If intending to say 'The school where I study is very good', say 'The school where I study is very good.' Suggestions: remove redundancy or rephrase with 'the school where I study'. Vietnamese: Câu thừa mệnh đề 'I study at' khiến câu sai; nên dùng 'Tanya High School is very good' hoặc 'The school where I study is very good'.

× My teacher is friend friendly and kind.

✓ My teachers are friendly and kind.

'Teacher' singular conflicts with 'friendly and kind' description; likely plural 'teachers' fits context. Also 'friend friendly' is incorrect repetition; use 'friendly'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'teachers' with 'are'. Suggestions: choose singular with 'is' or plural with 'are' and remove duplicate word. Vietnamese: 'friend friendly' là lặp sai; cần 'friendly'. Nếu nói nhiều thầy cô thì dùng số nhiều 'teachers are' để phù hợp.

× My students is fairly and carefully I oh.

✓ My teachers treat students fairly and carefully.

Original is confusing and ungrammatical. Likely meaning: teachers treat students fairly and carefully. Use correct subject 'teachers' and verb 'treat', and adverbs 'fairly' and 'carefully' to modify the verb. Remove filler 'I oh'. Suggestions: clarify the agent and action, ensure subject-verb agreement and proper adverb placement. Vietnamese: Câu gốc không rõ chủ ngữ và động từ; cần nêu rõ 'teachers treat students' và dùng trạng từ 'fairly'/'carefully'.

× Yes, I could. I think my high school could improve its facilities and the library and study areas.

✓ Yes. I think my high school could improve its facilities, including the library and study areas.

'I could' is odd as a response; better to say 'Yes.' Also list structure improved by adding 'including' and commas. Suggestions: use concise 'Yes.' and group related nouns with 'including'. Vietnamese: 'I could' nghe lạ ở câu trả lời; nên dùng 'Yes.' và dùng 'including' để liệt kê rõ ràng.

× It would also be great to have more specific where students can study in groups.

✓ It would also be great to have more specific spaces where students can study in groups.

Missing noun after 'specific' — need 'spaces' or 'areas'. Preposition 'in groups' is fine. Suggestions: add an appropriate noun like 'spaces' or 'areas' after 'specific'. Vietnamese: Thiếu danh từ sau 'specific'; cần 'specific spaces/areas' để câu hoàn chỉnh.

× I plan to finish my degree and content improve my list.

✓ I plan to finish my degree and continue improving my skills.

Original contains nonsensical phrase 'content improve my list'. Likely intended 'continue improving my skills'. Use 'plan to' + base verbs and 'continue' + gerund for ongoing improvement. Suggestions: replace unclear words with 'continue improving my skills' to express intent. Vietnamese: Cụm 'content improve my list' không nghĩa; nên dùng 'continue improving my skills'.

× I want to learn more about my my mother so that I can find a good job after graduation.

✓ I want to learn more about my major so that I can find a good job after graduation.

'Repetition 'my my' is an error. 'Learn more about my mother' unlikely context; probably 'major'. Use 'about my major'. Suggestions: fix repetition and choose intended noun 'major'. Vietnamese: Lặp từ 'my my' và dùng 'mother' có vẻ sai ngữ cảnh; nên là 'my major' để phù hợp với học tập và nghề nghiệp.