学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be more concise and confident. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove filler words (“I think”, “yeah”), and correct tense/grammar (e.g., “my job involves working as a tour operator”). Add one specific detail about duties to make the answer more informative.

範例: I work full time as a tour operator in the tourism sector. In this role, I organize itineraries and coordinate with local suppliers, which has improved my planning and customer-service skills.

建議: Provide a clear, grammatically correct statement of where you studied and give one or two specific details (e.g., subject studied or a memorable experience). Avoid vague phrases and filler words; use linking words for coherence.

範例: I studied at Hanoi University of Culture in Hanoi, the capital of Vietnam, where I completed a four-year degree in tourism studies. During my time there, I took practical courses in cultural heritage and worked on a group research project about local festivals.

建議: Answer directly and expand with specific evidence. Use plural/singular agreement and linking words (e.g., “because” or “for example”). Mention a concrete example of staff support or a research project to strengthen your answer.

範例: Yes, it was a good place to study because professors were accessible and supportive. For example, I worked with a lecturer on research into destination management, which helped me understand practical challenges in tourism planning.

建議: Be concise and correct grammar. State the change clearly, give a specific reason and a short consequence. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “work on the floor a lot.”

範例: Yes. I would like the university to improve its facilities, for example by installing elevators, because many buildings are multi-storey and older students and staff struggle to access classrooms easily.

建議: Use correct grammar and a clear structure: state the plan, give the reason, and add one concrete detail (program name or what you hope to gain). Avoid vague wording like “this measure.”

範例: I plan to study in Italy for two years next year to pursue a master's in sustainable tourism and destination management. I want to learn European approaches to sustainable practices and bring that knowledge back to improve tourism in Vietnam.

× I graduated from university last year and now have a job in the field I studied.

✓ I graduated from university last year and now I have a job in the field I studied.

Missing subject 'I' before 'have' causes sentence to feel like a run-on; adding 'I' clarifies the subject and maintains correct past-to-present narrative. Suggestion: include explicit subject in compound sentences when shifting clauses.

× Yeah and yeah, my job involved in working as a tour operator, which helped me expand my knowledge a lot.

✓ Yeah, my job involved working as a tour operator, which helped me expand my knowledge a lot.

Incorrect use of 'in' after 'involved' is a structure error; the correct pattern is 'involved doing' or 'involved working'. Remove the extra 'in'. Also remove repeated filler 'and yeah'. Suggestion: use 'involved working' or 'involved me working'.

× I studied at Hanoi University of Culture, where located in the capital city in Vietnam.

✓ I studied at Hanoi University of Culture, which is located in the capital city of Vietnam.

Missing verb 'is' and wrong relative pronoun 'where' cause a clause without a verb. Use 'which is located' or 'which is in' and 'of Vietnam' is the natural preposition. Suggestion: include 'is' and use 'of' for country possession.

× I spent four years studying at this university and I had a lot of time.

✓ I spent four years studying at this university and I had a great time.

Phrase 'had a lot of time' is semantically odd; likely intended 'had a great time' (past experience). This is a lexical/content correction within past tense. Suggestion: choose idiomatic expressions (a great time, enjoyed myself).

× I went my professor and also like my classmate as well.

✓ I went to my professor and also liked my classmates as well.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'went' and wrong verb forms: 'went to my professor' is unclear — likely intended 'went to see my professor' or 'I got along with my professor'. 'Like my classmate' should be past tense 'liked my classmates' and plural. Suggestion: use 'I went to see my professor' or 'I liked my classmates'.

× Yeah, studied and learned a lot of new things.

✓ Yes, I studied and learned a lot of new things.

Missing subject 'I' at the start of the clause. Add subject to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: always include explicit subject in responses.

× I mean at this university I had a chance to communicate with professor to learn more about the tourism industry.

✓ I mean, at this university I had a chance to communicate with the professor to learn more about the tourism industry.

Missing article 'the' before 'professor' makes the noun phrase indefinite; context requires 'the professor' or 'my professor'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the professor' or 'my professors' depending on meaning.

× I also learned and did research relating to cultural tradition and also destination management.

✓ I also learned and did research related to cultural traditions and destination management.

Use 'related to' rather than 'relating to' for noun phrase consistency; use plural 'traditions' and remove redundant 'also'. Suggestion: 'research related to' and pluralize countable nouns.

× I say yes.

✓ I would say yes.

Present simple 'I say yes' is unnatural for expressing opinion; 'I would say yes' or 'I would answer yes' is more appropriate. Suggestion: use 'I would say' when giving an opinion tentatively.

× I mean, when I study at at this university, I think their facility is was not very good.

✓ I mean, when I studied at this university, I think their facilities were not very good.

Tense inconsistency: 'study' should be past 'studied'. Also 'is was' is conflicting; use past 'were' for plural 'facilities'. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' to match context. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past experiences.

× I mean, we didn't have elevators. So student needs to work a lot, you know, like work on the floor a lot.

✓ I mean, we didn't have elevators, so students needed to climb stairs a lot.

Subject-verb and number agreement: 'student needs' should be plural 'students needed' to match general statement about people at the university; 'work on the floor' is unclear — likely 'climb stairs' or 'walk up and down stairs'. Maintain past tense 'needed'. Suggestion: use plural subjects for general statements and clearer verbs.

× So I wish university can have elevator.

✓ So I wish the university could have an elevator.

Use of 'can' is incorrect with 'wish'; use 'could' or 'would' to express desired but unreal situations. Also include 'the' before 'university' and singular 'an elevator'. Suggestion: use 'I wish the university had an elevator' or 'I wish the university could have an elevator'.

× I plans to go to Italy to study next year.

✓ I plan to go to Italy to study next year.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'I plans' is incorrect; correct is 'I plan'. This fits present/future planning. Suggestion: use base verb after 'I' in simple present for planned future actions.

× I would like to spend 2 years to study more about sustainable tourism and also tourism destination as well.

✓ I would like to spend two years studying more about sustainable tourism and tourism destination management.

Use gerund 'studying' after 'spend two years', spell out small numbers (stylistic), and adjust phrase 'tourism destination' to 'tourism destination management' for clarity. Remove redundant 'also' and 'as well'. Suggestion: use 'spend [time] doing' structure.

× Because a university in Vietnam I didn't have a lot of chance to study this measure.

✓ Because at universities in Vietnam I didn't have many opportunities to study this subject.

Word order and article use are incorrect: 'a university in Vietnam I didn't have' should be 'at universities in Vietnam I didn't have' or 'because the university in Vietnam did not give me many opportunities'. 'A lot of chance' should be 'many opportunities' and 'this measure' is incorrect word choice; 'this subject' or 'this area' is better. Suggestion: reorder clause, use plural 'universities' if speaking generally, and use 'opportunities' for countable chances.