学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子结构清楚，直接回答了问题，但有小的语法与表达问题（如专业名称和大小写）且信息可再精简以更自然。可以把专业名称改为更常见的表达并略微调整语序，使表达更流畅。建议注意冠词和并列词的大小写和连贯性。

範例: I'm a third-year student at Sun Yat-sen University, where I study microelectronics engineering.

建議: 回答直接且信息完整，说明了具体校区并补充了背景。不过句子稍显重复（再次提到专业），可以把信息合并成一句话，用连接词提高连贯性。注意地名的连字符和简洁表达。

範例: I study at the Shenzhen campus of Sun Yat-sen University, which is one of its five campuses, and I major in microelectronics.

建議: 回答自然且有具体理由，展示了兴趣和校园优势。可以再加一个具体例子（比如实验室或项目）来增强说服力，并用连接词顺畅衔接观点。

範例: Yes. I'm fascinated by semiconductor technology, and the campus has excellent research facilities, such as well-equipped cleanrooms and research labs, which allow me to gain hands-on experience.

建議: 回答明确并给出具体问题和原因，使用了因果关系。可以进一步提出具体改进建议（例如增加菜系或延长营业时间）来显得更有建设性，并简化语言以更口语化。

範例: Yes. I'd like the dining halls to be improved — there are only two cafeterias with limited choices, so it would help if they added more varied food stalls or extended opening hours.

建議: 回答清晰地表达了未来计划和原因，但时态使用有小问题（finished→finish）。建议使用正确时态并给出更具体的目标（例如偏好的学校类型或研究方向），以使回答更具体有说服力。

範例: After I finish my bachelor's degree, I plan to pursue a master's in microelectronics, probably in Hong Kong or Europe, because universities there have strong programs and excellent research opportunities in semiconductor technology.

× I am currently a junior at Sun Yat Sen University majoring in Microelectronics Science and engineering.

✓ I am currently a junior at Sun Yat-sen University majoring in Microelectronics Science and Engineering.

句中存在大小写与专有名词规范问题，University 名称中的连字符和人名大小写应规范为 Sun Yat-sen；同时专业名称中的 Engineering 应大写以符合专业正式写法。虽然不是严格的时态错误，但按表单中“Present tense issue”类接近当前时态描述的句子需保持一般现在时描述的规范性。建议：专有名词用标准拼写与大小写，专业名词首字母大写或按照学校正式写法。

× I study at Sun Yat Sen University, Shenzhen Campus, which is one of the university's five campuses.

✓ I study at Sun Yat-sen University, Shenzhen Campus, which is one of the university's five campuses.

同样需要规范专有名词的拼写（Sun Yat-sen），保持正式写法。时态为一般现在时，描述事实，应使用标准专有名词拼写。建议：使用学校官方英文名称。

× I am majoring in microelectronics.

✓ I am majoring in Microelectronics.

专业名称作科目或学位名称时通常首字母大写以示正式（Microelectronics）。时态为现在进行时，表述正在学习专业，句子结构正确。建议：在正式场合将专业名称首字母大写或使用学校正式写法。

× Yes, I am fascinated by semiconductor technology and the campus has strong research facilities that help me gain practical experience.

✓ Yes, I am fascinated by semiconductor technology, and the campus has strong research facilities that help me gain practical experience.

句子本身语法正确，但需要在并列分句间加逗号以改善可读性（连接词 and 前）。时态为现在时，描述持续的状态和事实，结构正确。建议：在连接两个完整句子时加逗号以符合书面英语习惯。

× I would like the dining halls on campus to be improved.

✓ I would like the dining halls on campus to be improved.

该句语法正确，使用虚拟语气表达愿望或建议，时态和结构恰当。无需修改。建议：句子已符合规范。

× There are only two cafeterias and the food options are very limited, so it's often hard to find something I want to eat.

✓ There are only two cafeterias, and the food options are very limited, so it's often hard to find something I want to eat.

主要问题是标点与并列连词的使用，句子本身数的一致性正确（two cafeterias 与 food options）。按“Singular and plural issue”检查，无需改变单复数，但建议在并列连词前加逗号提高可读性。建议：保持名词复数形式并在复合句中正确使用逗号。

× After I finished my bachelor's degree, I plan to pursue a master's degree, probably in Hong Kong or Europe because those places have strong programs in my field and offer good research opportunities.

✓ After I finish my bachelor's degree, I plan to pursue a master's degree, probably in Hong Kong or Europe, because those places have strong programs in my field and offer good research opportunities.

原句中时态不一致：开头使用了过去式 finished，但后半句表达的是将来的计划，应使用一般现在时或现在完成时作为时间状语从句来表示未来前提。将 finished 改为 finish（或用 After I have finished my bachelor's degree）可保持时态一致并准确表达“毕业后我打算”的意思。建议：表示在将来发生的先后关系时，用 After + 主句的现在时或现在完成时（After I finish / After I have finished），主句用将来时或情态动词表达计划。