学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn hơn và ngữ pháp chính xác hơn. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: "I am a grade 11 student studying chemistry."), sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể. Tránh lỗi từ vựng như "a lot of things in a social" và cấu trúc lặp. Dùng liên từ hợp lý và giữ dưới 4 câu.

範例: I am a grade 11 student studying chemistry. I am also learning several languages, including Vietnamese, English and Spanish. Outside class, I enjoy studying social subjects such as history and geography.

建議: Cần sửa lỗi từ và cấu trúc (ví dụ: "in bowling" có vẻ sai; có thể muốn nói "in a boarding school" hoặc tên trường). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu ngắn xác định vị trí và tên trường, sau đó nêu 1-2 đặc điểm cụ thể với liên từ để câu mạch lạc. Chú ý số ít/ nhiều động từ ("school has").

範例: I study at the Gifted High School in Guangzhou province. The school has many academic subjects and extracurricular activities, such as volunteering and tree planting, and I get along well with my classmates and teachers.

建議: Ý chính tốt nhưng cần diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn và sửa lỗi từ ("Orient" không đúng ngữ cảnh). Nên nêu lý do cụ thể vì sao tốt (ví dụ: học tập, hỗ trợ nghề nghiệp) và dùng liên từ để mở rộng ý. Giữ câu súc tích, tối đa 3 câu.

範例: Yes, it is a great place to study because the teachers are supportive and there are many opportunities for personal development. The school also helps students prepare for university or vocational training by offering career guidance.

建議: Ý hay nhưng cần cụ thể và dùng cấu trúc chính xác. Nên nói rõ những thay đổi bạn muốn và giải thích lợi ích. Ví dụ nêu cải thiện nào về cơ sở vật chất và cách tích hợp ngôn ngữ vào môn học, tránh cụm từ mơ hồ như "English graph history".

範例: Yes. I would like the school to improve its infrastructure, for example by renovating science labs and upgrading computer facilities. I would also like more integrated language lessons, such as teaching some maths or history content in English to improve students' practical language skills.

建議: Cần rõ ràng và ngữ pháp tốt hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề về kế hoạch (ví dụ: "I plan to continue academic studies at university."). Giải thích lý do cụ thể và tránh các lỗi như "to fight and work" hay thiếu mạo từ. Sử dụng câu nối để giữ mạch logic và giới hạn 2-3 câu.

範例: I plan to continue my academic studies at university because it will give me the knowledge and experience I need for my future career. I hope that higher education will increase my confidence and job prospects.

× I'm a student, I'm grade 11 of chemistry.

✓ I'm a student; I'm in grade 11, studying chemistry.

Use 'in grade 11' not 'grade 11 of'; add a participial phrase 'studying chemistry' to indicate subject. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join two independent clauses.

× I'm learning about many languages such as Vietnamese, English, Spanish and a lot of things in a social.

✓ I'm learning many languages such as Vietnamese, English and Spanish, and many things about society.

Remove redundant 'about' after 'learning' and use 'many languages' without 'about'. 'A lot of things in a social' is ungrammatical; use 'many things about society' or 'social studies'. Ensure parallel structure when listing languages.

× I study in bowling at Gifted High School in Guangzhou province, where many students dream.

✓ I study at the Gifted High School in Guangzhou province, which is a dream school for many students.

Use 'at' for schools, not 'in'. 'Bowling' seems incorrect here; likely 'building' or omit. Use 'which is a dream school for many students' for clear relative clause.

× I have a lot of friends and teachers in here.

✓ I have a lot of friends and teachers here.

Do not use both 'in' and 'here' together; use 'here' alone. 'In here' is used for enclosed spaces and is unnecessary.

× My school have many subjects and many activities like volunteering, planting trees and other activities.

✓ My school has many subjects and activities like volunteering and tree planting.

Use singular verb 'has' with singular subject 'school'. Avoid redundant 'many activities' and 'other activities'; combine items in a concise list. Use 'tree planting' for noun phrase.

× That is a great place to learn and improve myself.

✓ It is a great place to learn and improve myself.

Replace 'That' with 'It' for general statements about a place; both can work but 'It is' is more natural. No major grammar error but style improvement.

× This is a good environment to choose and find or Orient, like going to university or learning a trade.

✓ This is a good environment for choosing and finding an orientation, such as going to university or learning a trade.

Use 'for' with noun phrases: 'for choosing' and 'for finding'. 'Orient' is incorrect as a noun; use 'orientation' or 'direction'. Use 'such as' to introduce examples.

× Yes, I want to upgrade infrastructure and combine new language into subjects, like combining maths and English or English graph history.

✓ Yes, I want to upgrade the infrastructure and integrate new languages into subjects, for example combining math and English or teaching English through history.

Add definite article 'the' before 'infrastructure'. Use 'integrate' rather than 'combine new language into'. Use correct subject names: 'math' (or 'mathematics') and rephrase 'English graph history' to 'teaching English through history' for clarity.

× I think I will continue to academic school because it helps me to improve myself and provide many knowledge and experiences to fight and work in the future I can confident to.

✓ I think I will continue in academic school because it will help me improve myself and provide knowledge and experience so that I can be confident to work in the future.

Use 'continue in academic school' or 'continue with academic studies'. Use future 'will help' to match 'I think I will'. Use uncountable nouns 'knowledge' and 'experience' (no 'many'). Reorder final clause: 'so that I can be confident working in the future' or 'so that I can be confident about working in the future'. Improve modal/complement: 'be confident' not 'can confident to'.