学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Start with a direct, confident topic sentence and add one brief specific detail about your study level or field. Keep it natural and avoid contractions too informal for IELTS; use one linking phrase if adding detail.

範例: I am currently a student. I’m studying multimedia at college, so I don’t work while I’m completing my course.

建議: Answer directly with the institution or type of school and then give a specific supporting detail about the course. Avoid evasive phrases and informal fillers like “kinda” or “let's keep it a secret.” Use a linking word to connect ideas.

範例: I study multimedia at a local college. For example, my course covers video production and graphic design, which I find really useful.

建議: Give a clear opinion (yes/no) then explain reasons with specific details and a linking word. Replace vague phrases like “your schedule will be back” with concrete points about the timetable or facilities. Keep sentences concise and natural.

範例: Not really; I find it difficult because the timetable is very packed. For instance, we have classes almost every day, which leaves little time for self-study.

建議: Give a clear response about whether you want changes, then explain specifically what you would change and why. Avoid double negatives and unfinished thoughts. Use linking words and provide one concrete example of a change you would make.

範例: Actually, I would like some changes. For example, I would reduce the number of daily classes and improve career guidance services, because I had hoped to attend my preferred university and want more support.

建議: Respond directly and then outline a clear short-term plan or a possibility for the future. Use linking words such as ‘however’ or ‘but’ when contrasting, and be specific about possible directions (e.g., specialisation, internships, transferring).

範例: At the moment I don't have definite plans because I'm an incoming first-year student. However, I hope to specialise in animation during my course and possibly look for internships after my second year.

× It's kinda hard to tell, but let's keep it a secret for a moment. But my course is multimedia.

✓ It's kind of hard to tell, but let's keep it a secret for a moment. My course is multimedia.

The original used informal 'kinda' which is not grammatically standard; replace with 'kind of'. Also there was an unnecessary conjunction 'But' starting the second sentence; starting with 'My course is multimedia.' is clearer and grammatically correct. Suggestion: use 'kind of' in formal speech and avoid starting short sentences with 'But' unnecessarily.

× No, I don't think so 'cause your schedule will be back. You have everyday classes, like every day.

✓ No, I don't think so because your schedule repeats. You have classes every day.

Problems: ' 'cause' is informal; replace with 'because'. 'Your schedule will be back' is unnatural and mixes future/modal meaning incorrectly — intended meaning is habitual/repeated action so present simple 'repeats' or 'is the same' is appropriate. 'Everyday' is an adjective meaning 'ordinary'; use 'every day' (two words) to mean 'each day'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual routines and 'every day' for frequency.

× No, I don't think I don't like that place. 'Cause I wanted my dream university, but so the so the.

✓ No, I don't like that place. I wanted to go to my dream university, but I couldn't.

Original 'I don't think I don't like' contains a double negative and incorrect structure; correct to 'I don't like that place.' The second sentence has tense and completeness issues: 'I wanted my dream university' is incomplete — use 'I wanted to go to my dream university.' 'but so the so the' is filler and unclear; replace with a concise result such as 'but I couldn't' to indicate it didn't happen. Suggestion: avoid double negatives and use complete verbs (e.g., 'want to go') and clear connectors.

× Oh, I don't have any at the moment because I'm still incoming first year college.

✓ Oh, I don't have any at the moment because I'm still an incoming first-year college student.

Problems: 'incoming first year college' lacks articles and noun forms. We need the indefinite article 'an' and hyphenated compound 'first-year' as an adjective, plus 'student' as the noun. Use present continuous 'I'm still an incoming first-year college student' to describe current status. Suggestion: include necessary articles and proper compound adjectives when describing year/status.