学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Be direct, concise and correct grammar. Start with a simple topic sentence, then add one clear supporting detail. Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors (e.g., subject-verb agreement, word choice). Use linking words if you add details.

範例: I'm a student at Namanga State University of Foreign Languages, where I study English Language and Literature. I enjoy the program because it teaches both the language and the cultures of English-speaking countries, which helps me understand how language and culture are connected.

建議: Answer directly and use correct tense and word choice. Avoid repetition of previous information; briefly confirm and add one new specific detail. Use a linking word (e.g., "and" or "because") to connect ideas.

範例: I study at Namanga State University of Foreign Languages, where I major in English Language and Literature. I especially enjoy the program because it includes courses on literature and cultural studies that show how language reflects local traditions.

建議: Keep the answer natural and provide a clear reason with a specific example. Avoid filler phrases like "why not?" and be concise (max 4–5 sentences).

範例: Yes, it is a very good place to study, especially for languages. For example, the university offers courses in 14 different languages, so students can choose programs that match their interests and career goals.

建議: Directly answer the question (say yes/no or suggest a change) and give one or two clear, specific improvements. Avoid off-topic personal details; correct grammar (use 'want' not 'wanna', remove repetition). Use linking words to structure the response.

範例: Yes, I would like one change: more quiet study spaces on campus. Although I like its location and friendly community, additional quiet rooms would help students concentrate, especially those preparing for exams.

建議: Be concise and focused on study plans, even if personal circumstances affect them. Start with a clear statement about your plans, then give a specific plan or alternative (e.g., continue studies part-time, take online courses). Use correct grammar and avoid repetition.

範例: My future study plans depend on my husband's job, but I hope to continue studying. If we move to another city, I plan to enroll in an online master's program in linguistics or take evening courses so I can balance family and study commitments.

× Currently I'm a student at Namanga State University of Foreign Languages majoring in English Language and Literature. What makes my program particularly fascinating is that it cause parent language culture and tradition of English speaking countries.

✓ Currently I'm a student at Namanga State University of Foreign Languages majoring in English Language and Literature. What makes my program particularly fascinating is that it covers the native language, culture, and traditions of English-speaking countries.

Error: incorrect verb form and word choice ('cause' should be 'covers') and incorrect nouns ('parent' changed to 'native'; 'culture and tradition' pluralized). Reason: the present tense 'is that it cause' requires third-person singular verb 'causes' but contextually 'covers' better fits meaning. Also use 'native' or 'mother' instead of 'parent' and plural 'traditions'. Suggestion: use 'covers the native language, culture, and traditions of English-speaking countries' to be grammatical and clear.

× As I said, I studied at nominees at University of Foreign Languages, majoring in English Language and Literature. I especially enjoyed the program because it explores the language, culture and tradition of English speaking countries, which helps me understand how language and culture are connected.

✓ As I said, I study at Namanga State University of Foreign Languages, majoring in English Language and Literature. I especially enjoy the program because it explores the language, culture, and traditions of English-speaking countries, which helps me understand how language and culture are connected.

Error: tense inconsistency and word choice. 'Studied' (past) conflicts with current status; context requires present tense 'study' and 'enjoy'. Also 'nominees' is incorrect—likely 'Namanga' or university name; I used 'Namanga'. 'Tradition' should be plural 'traditions' and 'English speaking' should be hyphenated 'English-speaking'. Suggestion: keep present tense for current study and consistent verbs: 'I study' and 'I especially enjoy'.

× Yes, of course, why not? Actually, it's a good place for study, especially foreign languages, because we have 14 languages which can be studied.

✓ Yes, of course. Actually, it's a good place to study, especially for foreign languages, because we offer 14 languages that can be studied.

Error: article and preposition use. 'A good place for study' is better as 'a good place to study'; add 'for' before 'foreign languages'. Also 'we have 14 languages which can be studied' is awkward—use 'we offer 14 languages that can be studied'. Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'a good place to study' and 'offer' for programs.

× I definitely like it because it's very near to our home and there are a lot of students and my friends also and I wanna be together with my friends about near future due to my husband's work we we should to travel to another city.

✓ I definitely like it because it's very near our home, there are many students and my friends there, and I want to stay with them. However, in the near future we may need to move to another city because of my husband's work.

Errors: run-on sentence and incorrect conjunctions, informal 'wanna', repetition 'we we', incorrect infinitive 'should to travel', and awkward phrasing 'about near future'. Reason: multiple ideas were joined without proper connectors and formal grammar. Suggestion: split into sentences, use 'however' to contrast, replace 'wanna' with 'want to', use 'may need to move' or 'we may have to move' and 'because of my husband's work'.

× Oh, actually, it really depends on my husband's work, because my husband's work in another city and we should move here.

✓ Oh, actually, it really depends on my husband's job, because his work is in another city and we may have to move there.

Errors: tense and verb omission. 'My husband's work in another city' lacks the verb 'is'. 'We should move here' contradicts context—if his work is in another city, they would move there, not here. Also repeat 'my husband's work' is stylistically poor; use 'his work' or 'job'. Suggestion: use 'his work is in another city' and 'we may have to move there' to convey future possibility correctly.