学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: 句子需更自然并修正语法错误。回答可直接以主题句开头，然后补充背景信息并使用简洁句子避免重复。注意时态（I am a recent graduate / I graduated this year）和冠词（a recent graduate）。

範例: I’m a recent graduate. I majored in Public Administration and finished my degree this year, so I’m currently looking for graduate programs or job opportunities.

建議: 回答中存在重复和语法错误（stay staying）。应直接回答地点并给出具体原因，用连接词使逻辑更清楚。避免口头填充词如“Oh”或重复短语。

範例: I usually study in the university library because it’s quiet and free of distractions, so I can concentrate better and be more productive than when I study at home.

建議: 回答要连贯并避免短句碎片（“It has.”）。提供具体细节和使用连词提升流畅性，注意主谓一致（plants make）。

範例: Definitely. The library has a calm atmosphere which helps me focus, and there are many green plants that make the air feel fresher and more pleasant.

建議: 回答较好但句子冗长，可分成两句并使用连接词。注意代词一致（the library to have… and to offer…）和非限制性从句。具体说明“advanced technology”指什么会更好。

範例: Yes. I’d like the library to be upgraded with better technology, such as more computers and fast Wi‑Fi. I’d also appreciate free drink stations because small comforts would make studying more comfortable and relaxed.

建議: 句子有许多口误和语法问题（重复词、拼写错误 like “pu”, unclear phrasing）。应先明确目标（pursue a postgraduate degree），然后说明具体计划和准备措施，用连词衔接。避免时态混乱。

範例: In the future I’d like to pursue a postgraduate degree. I am preparing for the entrance exams now and have been studying intensively; I will continue to work hard to achieve this goal.

× I'm recent graduate, I majored in public administration at university and I graduated this year.

✓ I'm a recent graduate. I majored in public administration at university and I graduated this year.

句子缺少不定冠词“a”，在英语中表示单一身份（recent graduate）需要冠词。建议在“recent graduate”前加“a”。

× Oh, I study at university and I prefer going to the library.

✓ Oh, I study at university and I prefer going to the library.

原句时态总体正确，但可保留为一般现在时表示习惯。无需修改。

× I think it's a quiet place where I can concentrate and I think it's much more, much more productive than stay staying at home.

✓ I think it's a quiet place where I can concentrate and I think it's much more productive than staying at home.

比较结构后面需要动名词作比较对象，不能用不定式或重复词。原句中“stay staying”是重复且形式错误，应使用“staying”。同时删除多余重复的“much more”。

× Definitely. I think it's a very good place to study. It has a quiet atmosphere and we can focus on our work. It has. There are plenty of green plants which makes the air fresher.

✓ Definitely. I think it's a very good place to study. It has a quiet atmosphere and we can focus on our work. There are plenty of green plants, which make the air fresher.

原句“It has.” 是残缺句，应删除。关系从句中的先行词“plants”为复数，关系从句谓语也应为复数“make”。建议删除残缺句并把“makes”改为“make”，同时在“plants”和“which”之间加逗号。

× Yes, I want the library to have some changes like I want them to have advanced technology and facilities and also offer some free drinks which makes the library more comfortable and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I want the library to have some changes, like having advanced technology and facilities, and also offering some free drinks, which would make the library more comfortable and relaxing.

句中代词“them”指代不明且不合适，应该直接用动名词结构表达希望出现的变化；关系从句“which makes”应与先行词复数或整体情况一致，改为“which would make”。“relaxed”用于人或状态，描述环境更常用“relaxing”。建议使用动名词短语并调整从句时态与词汇。

× In the future, I'd like to pursue pu further study and now I I really post graduate degree. I made great effort to prepare the entrance exams and I will work harder to achieve this goal.

✓ In the future, I'd like to pursue further postgraduate study. I have really wanted a postgraduate degree. I have made great efforts to prepare for the entrance exams and I will work harder to achieve this goal.

原句存在拼写与结构问题（“pu”“now I I really post graduate degree”不通）。“pursue further postgraduate study”为更自然表达；表达过去的努力应使用现在完成时“have made”以表示与现在相关联，并且“prepare for the entrance exams”需要介词“for”。此外“effort”在此处通常用复数“efforts”。