学习— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Make a clear, grammatically correct opening statement and give one or two concise supporting details. Use correct verb forms and simpler structure. Avoid unnecessary repetition (e.g., saying you don’t have a full-time job twice).

範例: I am a student studying applied linguistics. I also work part-time at the service desk of a supermarket and sometimes at a bar-restaurant, but I don’t have a full-time job.

建議: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the university and program, then give one specific detail about the course using correct vocabulary (e.g., 'applied linguistics' and 'sociocultural communication'). Keep sentences short and precise.

範例: I study at the University of York in the UK. I am doing a graduate degree in applied linguistics, which focuses on sociocultural aspects of communication.

建議: Answer directly, then give one or two clear, specific reasons. Avoid filler words and incorrect words (e.g., 'asparagus'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' correctly. Keep to 2–3 short sentences.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the university offers a wide variety of modules. For example, I can take courses in technology, applied linguistics, and second-language acquisition.

建議: Give a clear opinion and one specific reason, using correct word order and vocabulary (e.g., 'campus location' and 'inconvenient'). Use a linking word like 'because' and avoid hesitations. Offer a simple suggestion if possible.

範例: Yes, I would change the campus location because it is quite far from the town centre and therefore inconvenient. Moving it closer would make commuting and social life much easier.

建議: State your plans clearly with correct vocabulary and sequence words (first/then/after that). Remove fillers and correct phrases such as 'finish my master's degree' and 'pursue an academic career' or 'apply for another master's program in the United States.'

範例: First, I want to finish my master's degree here. After that, I hope to continue my academic career by applying for another master's program in the United States.

× I am a student who are studying apply logistics but I have a part time job which is a service desk at the supermarket and bar restaurant but I don't have a full time job.

✓ I am a student who is studying applied logistics, but I have a part-time job at the service desk of a supermarket and a bar-restaurant, and I don't have a full-time job.

Errors: incorrect verb form with relative pronoun ('who are' should be 'who is' because subject 'who' refers to singular 'student'), wrong verb form 'apply' should be past participle/adjective 'applied', missing hyphens in compound modifiers 'part-time' and 'full-time', awkward phrase 'which is a service desk at the supermarket and bar restaurant' simplified to 'at the service desk of a supermarket and a bar-restaurant'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with relative clauses, use the correct adjective or past participle form for fields of study, and use hyphens for compound adjectives.

× I am studying at Graduate School in the UK, which is called University of York. My major is applying linguistic, so this is about holistic and social cultural communication.

✓ I am studying at a graduate school in the UK, called the University of York. My major is applied linguistics, which focuses on holistic and sociocultural communication.

Errors: capitalization and article use ('Graduate School' should be 'a graduate school' and 'University of York' needs the definite article 'the'), incorrect noun phrase 'applying linguistic' should be 'applied linguistics', and awkward adjective 'social cultural' should be 'sociocultural'. Suggestion: use correct field names and articles, and choose standard compound adjectives like 'sociocultural'.

× Yes, asparagus to good places to study because they offer me a lot of modules variety of module for example the technology related or linguistics and second language linguistic and in addition.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study because they offer a wide variety of modules, for example technology-related modules, linguistics, and second language linguistics.

Errors: nonsense word 'asparagus to' should be 'it is', subject pronoun and verb needed; pluralization and word order issues 'a lot of modules variety of module' corrected to 'a wide variety of modules'; compound adjective 'technology related' should be hyphenated 'technology-related'; 'second language linguistic' should be 'second language linguistics'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb structure, correct plural nouns, hyphenate compound adjectives, and use standard discipline names.

× Umm yes, I want change the places the location of my campus because it's a bit far away from our central area of the town so it's bit com inconvenient for me.

✓ Umm yes, I want to change the location of my campus because it's a bit far from the town centre, so it's a bit inconvenient for me.

Errors: missing infinitive marker 'to' in 'want change' should be 'want to change'; redundant phrase 'the places the location' simplified to 'the location'; article and word order in 'our central area of the town' corrected to 'the town centre'; typo 'com' removed. Suggestion: include 'to' after 'want' for verbs, remove redundancy, and use standard place nouns like 'town centre'.

× Uh, I want to finish my, uh, master courses suffer and then after that I want to pursue my academic career, uh, going to another master program at the United States.

✓ I want to finish my master's courses first, and after that I want to pursue my academic career by going to another master's program in the United States.

Errors: word 'suffer' is incorrect — likely intended 'first'; possessive form 'master's' needed for academic degree courses; 'going to another master program at the United States' needs preposition 'in' and possessive 'master's program' and clearer verb construction 'by going'. Suggestion: use 'first' for sequence, use correct possessive form for degree names, and use 'in the United States' for location.